Tell me what yall think


Slide back in my chair, passed out with a blare,
light bright to a glare, whats that in my hair,
what's goin on, why i can't wake up,
seein visions of my dawgs, Lost in the dusk,
im stuck, can't move, can't turn to see,
it's black again, i start to not breath,
shakin', lost while my bodys quakin,
quiverin, what the hell is happenin,
i drift back again, get more relaxation,
seein more shit, memories retracin,
facin his enemies, blind to see,
the side of tradgedy, the sign of collapsing,
the 9 is breached, it's pointed at me,
one in the leg, two in the chest, three in the head,
a light with a post, and some gates comes up next,
that's it, am i .......

Reviewed:
Dropz
Viscocity
Word Perfect

this way too basic...novice....simplicity at its full.....add complexity...mutlis n shit...few internals....it really ups the game....also it was really shoret..so ya cant get much feeling in it....worj on it...pZ...elevate..n learn

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