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03-30-06, 05:38 PM | #1 | |||||||
The Alien Toung
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Begining and End
IP: C527 8B3F
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/son...&songID=3719341
"begining and end" ^^^ some laid back shit ^^ 1st verse = Mind Immortal hook = me 2nd verse = me =hook= me 3rd verse mind immortal then me links---------------------------------------- SenseR-BX http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2704571 enygma and UNF- http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=225279
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03-30-06, 06:17 PM | #2 | |||
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I heard this on AIM.
M.I. had a creative flow scheme with the syllables. But, there were relatively few rhyming pairs at the start. That threw me off a bit. The "nigga" line seemed out of character. Otherwise, the flow was good and the lyrics weren't bad. CHO...everything was solid, except the "mind immortal" line. THat would have made more since had M.I. spit it. Good drop tho 1 |
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03-30-06, 06:30 PM | #3 | ||||||
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yep decent track
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03-30-06, 06:37 PM | #4 | ||||||
Flyweight
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IP: 8CF3 5E15
its nice to know the infiniTE elite drops props...aight yall back to class...intro to programming...lol i am gonna fail this shit ...
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03-30-06, 06:39 PM | #5 | ||||||
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lisinin first dude was straight good flow straight lyrics....hooks is good i like that shit 2nd verse was good l liked how it flowed and some good lines....3rd verse was proboly the best imo i liked it good track
rtf http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=225391 |
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03-30-06, 09:15 PM | #6 | ||||
O.wning Y.ou D.aily
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Wow.....Cho slowed down a little...lol. This is a dope track though guys ™
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03-30-06, 11:34 PM | #7 | |||||||
The Alien Toung
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IP: C527 8B3F
gooooooooooood lookin ppls
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04-03-06, 04:48 PM | #8 | |||||||
The Alien Toung
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IP: 7996 9D6E
holyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy sheep shit
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04-08-06, 03:20 PM | #9 | ||||
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1st MC- nice flow , lyrics is strate kept to concept of the song
Hook is average 2nd MC - flow is good, lyrics are good the way you constructed it............... both MCs at the end came as they did above.........overall strate track...... pz ~1~ |
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04-08-06, 04:18 PM | #10 | ||||
I don't lose
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IP: 9C2B 06EC
songs good.....
first verse....yea its good, pretty deep way to stay on subject... hook- think it needs an effect to diffirenate it from cho's verse cho - pretty good...you spit to the beat with an intresting flow scheme i like it 3rd vesre.....eh, nothing special but kept up near the level of the first two pretty good tack....good drop
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04-08-06, 04:29 PM | #11 | ||||||
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IP: 0825 899A
thxxxxxxxxx buddy...nice to see some honest feed.....
especialy like to see some critique i can actualy use
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04-08-06, 09:05 PM | #12 | |||||
The Paragraph President
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Mind Immortal:
I like the way you rap, the way you flex your voice kinda sound dumb. Just be yourself man. the flow was pretty strong and steady, delivery wasn't to bad, also goes with what I said about with the flexing of the voice. Cho You sound almost identical to Mind Immortal. But I can till that it's you cause of your lyrics, good ways of writting and also different from his. Your flow was almost the same man, also your delivery and the flexxed voice. Unless yall went with that style of sound it's not bad. rtf here: http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=225805
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04-11-06, 04:16 AM | #13 | |||||||
The Alien Toung
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IP: 7996 9D6E
thxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx willllllllllllllllll dooooooooooooo
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04-11-06, 11:14 AM | #14 | |||||||
Ya mom massages my nuts
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K...returning favor..typin as listening....oh naw I aint likign how son came in....he is OVER-forcing his voice...if u he jus used his normal tone this verse woulda been so much stronger....k..next verse....damn u got a over-exaggerated tone too...u do it a lil better but the exaggerated voice got played out in the 80s fam....ya flow was somewhat rushed IMO....this beat is weird...but I like...I like the conceptualism...an the abstract approach but u aint execute it how u could have, this song oozes potential...but yall delivery hurt ya, ya flows was sparatic...for a few bars u was right then you'd lose it for a few then comeback....lyrically simplistic format...but conceptually nice...yall kinda on sum Murs shit...he uses a simplistic type rhymes but has a deep message...this wasn't persay a deep track but it was unique an I enjoyed it for most part...I jus think it coulda been better....didn't like that lil bridge yall did when beat dropped either..if yall coulda made that more catchy it woulda took focus away from a few of the other flaws as well. But all in all this was a decent track...jus needs that polish ya know...anyways this the first time I ever peeped you cho & MI for that matter too...keep dropping.......1
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