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01-21-04, 07:58 PM
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Dynasty Soldiers Presents: Hope Washed Away
IP: F127 8F9A
Dynasty Soldiers Presents: Hope Washed Away
Once more Hope has washed away Everyone wants it not to go and to stay Nothing can stop it cuz its already gone Have it one day then its gone by dawn Cant save it now cuz it has withdrawn Oh well we will try to catch it again It will come back some day,but when? Feed back plz |
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01-22-04, 04:22 AM
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IP: DA1E A54F
nice but man...i can kik you out of the park.
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01-22-04, 04:29 AM
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nice
IP: DA1E A54F
nice stuff man, a bit soapy though.
vocab-8/10 rhyme scheme-8/10 message-7/10 similes and metas-6/10 feelings-8/10 overall-37/50 good but could be better |
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01-26-04, 12:47 PM
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IP: 1192 92A4
Hmm..Short and simple. I get the message from it. I think it could be a bit better. Im not saying its not good, cause it is. Work on your vocab a little...Just some of adive for yah
 peAce |
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