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| Phenom | Kingz | Dabatos | TonySelf | Tha Q | Half Breed | Tito | 7th End | RV Radio  |
04-24-05, 09:25 AM
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dope
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battle
IP: E197 1C6C
this effecx is fake your skill is going no where when you entered this battle u forgot to be prepared bitch i don't care what gay shit you have to say your a gay i have u shittin inside im'a blow you away you must think your good but your style is tragic im have you dissapear in a flash like magic your wack kid i'll pass u napkin to wipe dem tears everyone always rips u you'll be in battles 4 years so please clear nobody wants you around here mutha fucker when ur on a mic you raim queer my words give you fear ya chutching you nuts stayin at home wid ya mum is dat only time u get fucked you seem boring thats why my verse is ignoring you are the king of wack wearing a fake bling you can suck on my nuts i'll blast you wid gats this dude will have brain damage after ur attacked wid bats i'll sufficate u in a bag rob your every penny you got being an emcee requires skill it's safe to say u have not you get shot straight off the block don't act like tupac cuz your to damn wack and you fail to even attract this phony mc needs to come up wid better rhymes better come up wid somet good ive never seen ur wack lines but u cannot combat mine they'll make you go blind think you can do better den me you can kiss the behind I already killed your ass one my first fucking punchline I bet your a fat little cunt whos always in the lunchlines thats why i an't seen ur pic up on the damn mug shots nobody wanna see an ugly migit who sucks cocks |
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04-24-05, 01:58 PM
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dope
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IP: E197 1C6C
drop feed back please
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04-24-05, 02:09 PM
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leave you rest'n pz's
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IP: 0CC4 EFEF
your vocab is rather simplistic
line length is good, complexity you need to work on quite a bit...i really wasnt feelin any of your punches(they were non existent)..no hate...just given feed
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i'll play on ya consience, ya contents is complete nonsense
speak of biting, then you fucks flip everyone of my damn concepts what the fuck, was you high..? did you think i wouldn't recognize lines that i made then you come up some bullshit tryna prove that im gay...! . . fake fucks..move on...! |
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04-24-05, 02:22 PM
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IP: 3240 794D
This was an average drop..
I Felt you could have used better wordplay , and vocab .. Structure was okay but try to match up your bars if possible, Complexity was blah , cus most of the words you rhymed w/ are pretty simple, Punchlines were blah, because really nothing was hitten hard for you , overall keep it up , and elevate on punchlines , and complexity, PS: Drop a link or this will be closed
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