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Punch Lines To Some Cats
IP: 005F B7E2
Punch Lines To Some Cats
You run around as a dumb washed up clown making harsh Corrupt sounds, why march up and down town getting squash By pounds of nouns from my verbal attack son, you the largest slut Best harvest nuts you a squirrel in my world my bling cut Like King Tut, like tasty religion make hasty decisions You a pasty pigeon no wings don’t fly high and see visions Locate vicinity go hate the enemy throw a grenade on toe Like a low grade parade you hoe made like prostitutes oh no! Try sprint like flo-jo but a no-go in rap, spit loco crap as a bozo Just a haughty misfit G and your shorty should git wit me I’ll show Her a good time, hood wine is Boones farm, soon alarm her candy Taste and panty lace, girl’s fanny erase my sexual thought dandy Look you shook and disable got your book on the table Pages don’t turn I rages learn grammar just to stable And turn glamour my way, proceed wet with beads of sweat On my forehead you hardcore misled like flunkies in school regret Monkeys don’t rule you got jungle fever I’m humble like a beaver Like mike I be with Spike lee on sneaker commercials, got a retriever To guard my yard retards like you not allowed on grass your style Don’t last long not fast and strong the trash is all senile |
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I don't really think that was a poem, but besides that it was okay. I did not like how you would continue the lines to the next line. Vocab is okay. Flow was pretty good. Overall, it was fairly good, but in the wrong sub-forum.
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rap4 ( P ) Pronunciation Key (rp) n. Slang: A form of popular <a href="http://www.ntsearch.com/search.php?q=music&v=56">music</a> developed especially in African-American urban communities and characterized by spoken or chanted rhyming lyrics with a syncopated, repetitive rhythmic accompaniment. ^Don't forget the white man^ Poetic Scriptures poems: http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=157364 http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=157462 |
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IP: 005F B7E2
Thanks For The Props And Critiques For Real Doe
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IP: 0825 899A
This belongs in the open mic thread.....but it was good, it had great flow and vocab, but it wasnt a poem, maybe read some others in this forum to get an idea......1
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IP: 005F B7E2
Thanks For The Props On This One For Real
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