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Old 03-01-05, 10:54 AM   #1
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yo' tell me how many feel like this
constantly hated by many, but loved by most
nobody does it like me im a lyrical ghost

with an open mic i never needed no crew to get me throught
i knew what i had to do if i wanted to be apart of it to
that was ta keep my heart true........
I'm to be myself, i got hooked onto rap when i was twelve
younge enought ta believe in a dream, but
old enought to tell tha diffenece between heaven an hell
an what they mean..............

The streets razed in a fucked up neighbourhood daily
i got my ex-girlfriend goin copletly crazy
but i dont let that shit faze me........she
took my baby girl away from me
fuckin bitch made me out to be lazy as fuck
but i was tha brains of tha family that seem to have tha luck
her mouth never shut,not even for 2sec selfiouse little mut

so let's face it,this shit is just tha basic's
you strugglin to make it to tha top
so basically you dont understand tha true meaning to hip-hop
my rap does tha talkin
this is my last lap befor i start walkin............ha ha ya

im like tooth decay, an lockjaw rolled into one
cuz ya mouth is constantly shut, an there fallin out one by one
now tha fun time's over , so bitches mover over'
who's heart is colder when you a dieng soilder
FUCK IT IM OUT PEACE........................CB83
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Old 03-02-05, 12:46 PM   #2
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yo I honestly thought this was really lifeless (if I may)...i was not feeling it...

I dont know if this is personal or whatnot but I just wasn't feelin it...u said a line in there about being basic...and I think that's what this is man...u need to up ur vocab and wordplay and all that interesting stuff so the reader can actually get insight from this...anyway I just thought I'd say something cuz no one else said anything...and so u can return the favour...and u better...

here's the link:

heat of the moment- from ya boy feat..doe bagz
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