GENESIS #1 (let me know if you want part II)

The worlds were still, heartless and fill with darkness
No creatures living the features unforgiving no smartness
No streams to blend not even a team of men the place empty
A disgrace simply to exist in this form just a brisk storm of wimpy
Mass floating and promoting nothing good time for a godly session
No law imperial just raw material waiting to be shaped for manly professions
No strategy or aggression and that bought a battery of questions
To god after an odd grave storm, god gave it form with blessings //
I try flow quote that float like a rowboat on strong river and gone
And deliver the word in Hip Hop you can’t slip a lot and roam
Righteous you might just get to hell unknowingly not a good home //
God regret the sight and said “let there be light” the space foamed loud
Like an unknown crowd as it burst through layers of night god was proud
Then time begin like the tick tock on a slick hot wrist watch he set
Apart light from dark, he immerse the world with sun not done yet
He thirst to hurl a ton more of improvement, light became day and
Night remain the way of darkness, one day was finish and he planned
Do more the sun hung alone loud bang of sunlight on the land //
Day two was a way true the earth stands still as god plan to spill
Much knowledge and proceeded with truth it needed a roof to fill
The empty space above give it a taste of love man will be thrilled

I want part 2...so i can laugh some more.

- 2 links or il close this.

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my link (http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2516113)

my link (http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2516283)

................glad maybe if you act a lil more mature you'll get some betta feed other then
Links or Closed.................but i see you kno how to use multies only if you would use bigger words it'll show me that you really kno how to use them correctly

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crhyme sindicate
Open Mic Hall Of Famer

RTF on Beyond Deaths Horizon............Complex Multies added in that piece

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crhyme sindicate
Open Mic Hall Of Famer

bthat's th epoint I been amking to you bigger words move me away from my audience feel me? tone down the vocab

sand nabs my gladbag
so I drag my fads back
im gay and freepost
so no one feeds my threads


Just a sample of your own work on my pieces. Keep elevatin' playa.

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Blow It - Topical

this stuff was real it happened come on with the responses and critiqes for real

Don't be a fuckin dick head in other folks threads then. you've NEVER posted real feed for anything i've posted. Show some love and i'll do the same fucker.

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Blow It - Topical

reading your open mics makes me throw up in my mouth...

i didnt know you could put so much garbage in one glad bag...are you one of those forceflex things?...

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