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Old 12-02-03, 09:47 PM   #1
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Da structure

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everyone always says sumtin bout my structure, i dont know if its me but am i doin sumtin wrong. or is it just da way yall battle around here?

sample:
destroyin~my~foes, breakin~ya~bones from head~to~toe, ya cant heat up a battle so u "spit~shit~cold"/

ima spik havin better "rhymes" then flip~mode, ill take every stolen word from ya mouth and leave ya wit a "stripped~throat"/

my montrous rhymes are scarin ya-have ya runnin~out~ya~house, when dis nigga says hes "a hard nigga" it just means dat watchin black ppl leaves him "Seriously~aroused", da truth is killa class couldnt spit hot shit if he had diareha comin~out~da~mouth!!/


yall tell me wats wrong wit dat?
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Old 12-02-03, 10:15 PM   #2
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structure is how your lines are done

this is how you do it when you rhyme and battle people and it is rearlly gay/

this is what it should look more like ya know?//
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Old 12-02-03, 10:15 PM   #3
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in other words ure lines are too long shorten them down and try to keep them all the same length
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Old 12-03-03, 10:53 AM   #4
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o
ok, i guess i get it
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Old 12-03-03, 02:21 PM   #5
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simple as that

youl find if you have abetter structure your flow improves aswell..cus youl match sylabls in lines
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Old 12-05-03, 03:10 PM   #6
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your structure is wack!
try to keep the number
of syllables even and
your bar lenghth also even
tha'll make it easier to read

^^^like this

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