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05-25-05, 10:51 PM
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...The Drop Of A Lifetime...
IP: 8A17 F701
Yo a keystyle
. . Yo a heart is only as good as the body its in, Life is short to you but to me its a blessing, A brain is great to have fore all of us use, Able to think unconsiously--a miricle, A consience life in a persons head, Speaking to a man or one with peace, Death the start of eternal life for those, A mic a device witch lets us speak our mind. . . The Style Change... . . Yo words are lines connected by points, able to relieve stress if out in the right joints, Language communication through native toungs, i breath Poetry therefore i have deep lungs, you speak through open mics, i speak to open minds, in rhymes, and seamless lines, connection through the lime light, as you read this drop of a lifetime. . . . Feed Please.......Thanks for reading!! |
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05-26-05, 12:32 AM
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<<-Carpe Noctum->>
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IP: 28AD 5545
This was a decent drop, i felt you could have put more effort into the words and what you were trying to convey emotionally. Although, you definatley had the right idea with this concept, i don;t think it was your drop of a lifetime. I thought the first keystyle was more original, because the words seemed to flow out more. Keep dropping and i hope that what i said made sense,as i was not trying to be offensive,but helpful..1
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