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09-11-06, 06:23 PM | #1 | ||||||
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TheSinnister vs Sane
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Picture Battle
Check in due: 9/14 Verse due 9/20 Line limit open: Last edited by Peace : 09-11-06 at 11:51 PM. |
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09-11-06, 09:54 PM | #2 | ||||
GG Haterz
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Hmmm...interesting.
30 lines around?
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09-11-06, 09:59 PM | #3 | |||||||
Under Oath
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Checkin in this muh fuckah!.......................
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09-14-06, 05:02 PM | #4 | |||||||
Under Oath
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30 lines, yeah thats fine, 30 lines each....Come hard or go home......
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09-20-06, 03:49 PM | #5 | ||||
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you both suck..
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09-20-06, 10:22 PM | #6 | ||||
GG Haterz
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Verse due today, don't go choke on a cock yet.
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09-20-06, 10:28 PM | #7 | ||||
GG Haterz
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I keep my message simple, but the truth remains hidden, Because if you don’t search for the truth in it then it is forbidden. Maybe I just don’t appeal because of the truth I say, Maybe it’s cuz if I had the opportunity for millions I’d throw it away. Maybe it’s because of my color, but I’d like to think, That even though we’re on the brink, It wouldn’t matter if I’m the paper or the ink. Is it because of how I speak, is it something in my speech? Is it because I don’t always like to make songs for the beats? I plant the seed and wait for it to grow, hoping everyday so That I can come back one day and see how high it is or low. Is it because I speak in riddles that make sense in simplicity, Is the real message so complex that they aren’t understandin me? I keep spittin out barrages, but the bullets won’t pierce the shield, I feel like I’m rushing into open fire in an empty field. Cuz that’s all music is, a battlefield where we shoot sounds, My philosophy is if I’m not above my enemies I’m below the ground. Perhaps it’s because I just don’t fit in with the youth today, The way I talk, think, and act all have an impact on what I say. I think the real reason they won’t listen is simple yet flawed, Why would anyone listen to me when they won’t listen to God? That’s why I keep writing, hoping to see God’s face and hear it, The chorus of angels singing to him and to feel his spirit. Cuz he is the air we breathe, without him we’d die, So ask yaself this, if he doesn’t care about you then why Does he let you live and not just send you straight home, Why does he allow you to let live with family instead of alone? They won’t listen, and I can move past that fact, Cuz the others I can inspire will always pick up the slack. The power of my mind to imagine such wonderful sights amazes me, Tonight maybe I can finally understand what completely dazes me. I lift my mind to the sky, forget my arms, heart or my eyes, Cuz none of them seem to be able to hold themselves when I try to fly.
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09-20-06, 11:01 PM | #8 | |||||||
Under Oath
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~~hevans Valley~~~
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HEVANS VALLEY ---------------------------------------- Blood line battles are raging, In the arena of caged minds, Crimes of deceit perpetrating, Force feeding poisonous lies Im walking where the shadows dance to see where i begin Umungst these clouds ,I'm searching of a personal proof within Haven't we lost it all, when Blue skies hue turned to evergray Each dawn turned to blacker peaks so deep to the embrace of dismay Clarity and purity of intent Fear is just a weapon for the brave Emotionless, frozen weapon set a Glacier slicing like a blade The line is crossed Not ahead,not behind,but in other dimensions Blindly, beyond fine senses i see a univiverse of divine complexion Mist lies upon ground resisting strength of the nocturnal breeze It chills living beings,Any present exsistance would feel unease Diseased and Eating Like An Abscess, A sun enters the solar domain Deceased, ten thousand degrees to embrace the horizion into flames Arise to the palace as now it wakes and takes destiny from it's past Opening its doors it now awaits and Haunting your soul will die at'last Do you know what's in the sky? That Provoked danger to the human race There should have been a paradise instead of a killer out in space So many times, I've been lost And blinded by the purity of light Now I feel just like a wolf who intuitivley forgot how to fight The Universe is empty through grey instead of marbled skies I shut my eyes and fantasize as my demise as it capes alive Deprived from truth and over dusk I'll ascend over the powerful agony I'm the cradle of insomnia I've been sent from the dawn of supremacy Physical disorder obeys the Main draft of pursuading threatening power Persuades the fact of beliving im natures great famous Predator Vacation to the depths of hells gates,For adventure and escape. Ignoring All the fatal warnings was thy most devistating mistake Beneath the awesome beauty of nature,Lay violence, danger and death. They were warned... and now they will, Breathe their last breath! "" Now He walks alone, in the forever fight to reach the gates, misunderstood that hevans valley remains a endless on going path.................. |
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09-20-06, 11:02 PM | #9 | |||||||
Under Oath
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Choke on that .................................................. ....
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09-20-06, 11:42 PM | #10 | ||||||
Whys That?
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IP: 5285 DC82
lol @ you spelling heaven wrong. good drop. lets see some votes.
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09-20-06, 11:49 PM | #11 | |||||||
Under Oath
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^^^^^ LOL OOPS hahaha, yeah im kinda tired...........
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09-21-06, 03:32 PM | #12 | ||||
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heh, sorry bout the comment. but you still dropped late >_<
jkz. noose - bad syllable count, man, the flow got fucked up, because the rhyme scheme wasn't very complex. the topic use wasn't abstract, and was pretty simple, but you got a decent story out.. vcabulary was decen,t it wasn;t ike amazing, and you could easily tell you were forcing vocabulary... so decent piece... letcwhatsanegotst sane - sane, your vocabulary wasn't as pretty as noose's but you didnt force it.. your flow was decent, just a little better than sinnisters, and you told a more original story... so for the factors of better flow and stroy ill need to give the win toooo sane..
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09-21-06, 07:20 PM | #13 | ||||||
Whys That?
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Votes needed .
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09-21-06, 09:31 PM | #14 | |||||||
Under Oath
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Would it be ok to ask what a more original story is soul?
Oh and congrats to sane for his vote, hopfully more will come |
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09-21-06, 09:40 PM | #15 | |||
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A more original story would be not doing a picture of a guy in the clouds about heaven... but yeah on with the vote
Sane-Your vocab was meh for the most part and your imagery was good... the rhymescheme and lfow was very on point and didnt really fall off anywhere... also i liked the direction you chose. Sin-Your vocab was great in this i liked the use of words and it didnt really seem forced... also your sylabal count like soulstic said wasnt really that graet but who gives a fuck about sylabal count i dont do that shit when i write and noone usually complains about it with me... your imagery was decent but your emotion lacked alot actually... V/ sane for doing the best... blah blah blah.. No hate though to etiher good verses
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