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02-16-04, 03:06 AM | #1 | |||||||
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I Wonder
IP: 4577 CD9A
hey, im new and dys is da first thang ive posted so dun be too mean... <3
i wonder if hes felt tha pain ive felt in tha black hole he calls his heart, i wonder if hes ever had his emotions all torn apart, i wonder if he'll feel tha same about me as i feel for him, i wonder if he'll feel this way like i do again, i wonder if i'll feel wut i feel for him forever, i wonder if all these tears ive cried could go n form a river, i wonder if i died tonite would he even shed a tear, i wonder if he'd really ever loved me dear, i wonder if he truly knos wut he's dun to me, i wonder if he even cares.. well i do.. cant he see, i wonder wut hed do if he were in mai position, i wonder if he too would stay up at night jus dreamin and wishin, i wonder i wonder i wonder, that is how i spend mai time, wonderin if im ever on his mind ..... ~*~*xNottyXBabex*~*~ |
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02-16-04, 03:09 AM | #2 | ||||
PuRe AzN..
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IP: 7716 E80A
britania.. good shit.. listen work on the structure a bit make all the lines even it helps it soud better when they say it in they're mind.. overall nice tho.. work on vocab.. but some good stuff here britania
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02-16-04, 10:20 PM | #3 | ||||
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IP: 8C97 3A3C
im liking this peice... reminds me of a girl who made me choose between her a hiphop... why do people do shit like that? hahaha anyway, yea i dig the concept probably more than i should... love the way the titles all working with the peice itself, tho this line "i wonder if all these tears ive cried could go n form a river" im not too sure about
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