All this fucking-shit..i cant even be ducking-it...and ill be honest I got problems/
I take everything the wrong-way..cause I do things the long-way…and issues? I got’em/
And I cant even speak-cleary…plus my own peeps-fear-me…this is just-not-good/
I have no place-to-turn…I guess I gotta face-the-burn..cause I can’t trust-the-hood/
Things are starting to get drastic….and the fact-is….I can’t even get myself in order/
I try to remain calm..but I just clench my palms..cause im on the verge of crossing the border/
I know I wont be making-it…cause im always taking-hits…and it just kills-my-heart/
I ask myself why-kill?..cause people don’t care how I-feel…just as long as I fill-my-part/
And I try to stop-the-hate..but my success is not-that-great…but yet I still-try/
But hope is slowly diminishing..while this next guy im finishing…but one day it will-die/


its a shorter than what i usually do but, Leave me some FeedBack on it, Thanks.

yo this was a nice piece here ....really like the style and the multis u used.....flwo was on point and the wordplay was skittish but still good..........keep dropppin holmes very nice


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Hey man, thanks for the feedback, its much appreciated, keep the feedback coming.

yo thanks for the feed back on myn...apreciated...and on to yours..flow was good, metass were good..word play was decent..it was a good read..it would be better if you add onto it in the future...keep it up man 1

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Hey man thanks for the feedback, much appreciated, keep it coming in..thanks

Really like it mane.good flo and multies.keep it up i love all yo shit u spit masta c.holla mane.


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flow flow flow.... that had me on the edge of my seat
mulits could have been better, a few even seemed forced
good drop none the less

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Uppping for some more feedback, if you check it out please leave some feedback, its much appreciated, thanks.

nice drop, liked the multi's. the flow was good, wordplay was ok. i really liked the rhyme scheme, stayed on topic and was good. keep it up.

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Upppping this for some more feedback, if you check it out leave some feedback to let me know what you think, Much Appreciated, Thanks.

was an alright read man. everything was on track but if I know u as well as I do I think u could do better. but other then that it was a good read. but to break it down ur wordplay lacked a bit but flow was nice, multi's coulda been a bit better (vocabulary wise) and ur vocab was kinda lacking to but u had a good rhyme scheme so keep it up bro. peace.

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