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11-30-03, 01:44 AM | #1 | ||||||
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Driving Home
IP: E0E5 1E0E
[driving a way in silence
the engine growling as though it was a homeless stomach this cabin steadily becoming my dreamy abode wearily, i awaken, finding myself sadly alone. the defroster is doing double time trying to erase your ever present presence as i do all i can to keep it. the oncoming headlights are as bright as your outgoingness if only i could converse with them as i do with you. these reflective waters are fooling me, tricking me into thinking i'm wishing upon placid stars as i begin to see double through my watery eyes. dying to use tissues on issues rather than death, i pressure my eyes with each waivering goodbye i give farewells have never fared well with me, but we're all always living for tomorrow. i am continually arriving at yesterday's doorstep, the engine dying the same way it has for years, the valiant frost finally clearing, as i silently arrive so far from home.] |
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11-30-03, 03:41 PM | #2 | ||||||
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Pretty nice peice
you dident seem to have a ryme scheme of any kind but im kinda thinking you did that on purpose it was kinda hard to read at some spots but overall good |
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