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05-09-03, 08:06 PM | #1 | ||||||
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Life in the HOOD :: hot drop ::
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Break of dawn arrises this Mexican faces the horror of-the-hood//
mind reacts wanting to shut his eyes only if-he-could// should stay home violence around escalating-each-day// friends getting layed into thier grave getting killed-in-everyway// courage has enough to go to school proceeds puts on his coloured-fitted// cries passing the chalk marks his friend lay facedown cold-blooded// mind jolts blood-clotted sees the holes from the semi in-his-chest// scenario-becomes-perplex thoughts through his head who's-next// staring at nobody scans at objects needle from crack fiends looking-for-a-fix// family depicts a bad life in this non-caring-matrix// arrives at school stunned takes his first steps-in-awhile// skipped cause of all the trauma skeptic about life thoughts-in-denial// corrupted school another gang fight errupts 9-1-1~to-dial// police instigate color profiling begins was 2 caucasians that had-a-brawl// Five~0 making coloured people-crawl Hand cuffed pushing us to make-us-fall// Fuck them he says We-standing-tall Cops threatens i'mma hurt and jail-y'all// Interigation-begins gets the point across causing the ruckus-were-caucasians// people point first to inspect crime are blacks-&-mexicans// plans for school gets cut short principal suspends for distractions// life is filled with-demons they lurk and may end up to be-friends// all this transpired in the life of Cliptik flex at days-ends// constructive feedback much appreciated.... |
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05-09-03, 08:29 PM | #2 | ||||||
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nice story-tellin,kinda lost me a few times but overall it wuz dope.Stay ^
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05-09-03, 08:33 PM | #3 | ||||||
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^ thanks man appreciate it.....
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05-09-03, 09:50 PM | #4 | ||||||
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uppin
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05-09-03, 09:56 PM | #5 | |||||||
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ummmmmmmm , Ill story tellin , , i Liked ur word choice , your wordplay was Ill as alwayz , some of it was confusin , because ur lines were to long , , , so shorten up some of ur lines , , , , overall i give u a 8/10
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05-10-03, 12:32 AM | #6 | ||||||
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thanks...... appreciate it uppin
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05-10-03, 01:15 AM | #7 | ||||||
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...uppin
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05-10-03, 01:31 AM | #8 | ||||||
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good stuff, but what hood are u from
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05-10-03, 02:42 AM | #9 | |||||||
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I felt the piece it was cool. dawg keep postin
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05-10-03, 12:05 PM | #10 | ||||||
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thanks appreciate the replies . what hood if u knew toronto u'd know rexdale is the pj there and thats where i reside at
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05-10-03, 12:39 PM | #11 | ||||||
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uppin.....
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05-10-03, 01:22 PM | #12 | ||||||
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dont sleep
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05-10-03, 01:46 PM | #13 | ||||||
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ZZZZ
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05-10-03, 04:02 PM | #14 | ||||||
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y'all sleepin on hotness
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05-10-03, 04:10 PM | #15 | |||||||
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cries passing the chalk marks his friend lay facedown cold-blooded//
mind jolts blood-clotted sees the holes from the semi in-his-chest// scenario-becomes-perplex thoughts through his head who's-next// staring at nobody scans at objects needle from crack fiends looking-for-a-fix// family depicts a bad life in this non-caring-matrix// arrives at school stunned takes his first steps-in-awhile// skipped cause of all the trauma skeptic about life thoughts-in-denial// corrupted school another gang fight errupts 9-1-1~to-dial// TIGHT ASS BARS DOG, FA REAL THIS ENTIRE PIECE WAS AWE INSPIRING NA MEAN...GOOD SHIT PEACE |
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