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12-06-03, 06:24 PM | #1 | |||
A King Missing a Queen...
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" Remember our Love " ( Full Rap )
IP: 8D7B 43DF
Remember the times we held hands, made plan's
Knowing your my ladie, and I am your man Your love is grand, and I wont let this destruct From my house to your house, we can only go up... ( X2 ) My effort has been endless, when we met I became friend-less Our hearts collided, and knew we were defence-less Our lips went from across the school yard, to close inches Until that magical Day we showed our love, it proved to be spend-less Your my heart, soul, the missing face of all my pictures Highest on my scale of ricter, we were stuck like stickers I would give a kiss goodnight every time the moon went to set We have no regrets, Just trying to work on our future success I will give you my last breath, I will trade the bad in for good Cause its all for you baby, I hope I am understood Your my life, My future wife, there to make everything right When darkness showers on me, you continou to bring light Please dont leave, when I say ' I Love you ' just believe me Your my need, with out you I have no one who will lead... Remember the times we held hands, made plan's Knowing your my ladie, and I am your man Your love is grand, and I wont let this destruct From my house to your house, we can only go up... ( X2 ) Forgive-ness, thats what you gave me when I was thinking crazy Our constilations colide, no need for messages from haites I made bad choices, but you stuck with me to make things better So many letters, and hard roads through the dangerous weather We can make it, Like I said satan is face-less So lets keep our eyes on each other, and just pace-this You touch me with words, that ive only read in the Bible Our love will go bridle, with-out you, im known as suicidle Your my idle, your strong where I can only be so week Our love has no peak, No ups and downs, so we dont leap We fly like birds that know death is coming Running like Lions with there pride, knowing this could be there last hunting We will meat soon, finally after this long time, in the same room But im always there, consider me the sun and the moon Remember the times we held hands, made plan's Knowing your my ladie, and I am your man Your love is grand, and I wont let this destruct From my house to your house, we can only go up... ( X2 ) As you touch my skin, it begins to bump n go tense Issue's we've rinsed and spent time thinking through non-sence Our love is eternal, Might be hard but keeps a hard kernal All my thoughts placed in your mind, My walking Journal You know me from the inside, to out-side, and the out-side in Remember memories of those memories, but no thoughts of an end I can depend on you, the only one I trust with the darkest secrets To other's im read-less, but her skill of it leaves me speach-less I bought you rubbies, diamonds, silver, but none match my writes Those are the only ways, you can see through our sites Is to check my poems, letters, and notes of forgive-ness With-out you by my side baby, My time on earth is Sense-less... Remember the times we held hands, made plan's Knowing your my ladie, and I am your man Your love is grand, and I wont let this destruct From my house to your house, we can only go up... ( X2 ) Just know I will always Love you... ------------ This is kind of a filter of things going through me and my girls long distance right now. I had to move away in july, so its been hard ever since. ( Anyone who has knowledge will know what I ment about the Haities Line...) ---> Rate what you think about this hommies
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12-06-03, 06:24 PM | #2 | |||
A King Missing a Queen...
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IP: 8D7B 43DF
Links:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...6976#post966976 - Rule http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...6991#post966991 - Emerge http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...6995#post966995 - Insane Lyricists
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12-06-03, 06:41 PM | #3 | |||||||
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damn, that was great, your flow and emotion and wordplay was awesome, you had a great song here, it would sound great on audio keep it up mayn pz
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12-06-03, 06:51 PM | #4 | ||||||
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IP: 75C1 3274
this was real nice nice hook nice everything i really enjoyed this one i really felt your emotion in this that hook was nice i liked it so much i went back and read it again beatiful....hahaha
can u hit my piece up "underpriviledged" keep this up man it was good |
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12-06-03, 07:18 PM | #5 | |||
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IP: 8D7B 43DF
Uppin this, and thanks for the feedback hommies...
OUT -High Class a.k.a Confusion
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12-06-03, 08:05 PM | #6 | |||
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damn hommie. You sound like me. This reminds me of my song "babygirl" Keep spittin that nice shit. If your girl sees this, I'm pretty sure she'll appreciate it. Keep spittin fam.
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12-06-03, 08:06 PM | #7 | ||||||
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That was fantastic.. Great emotional/feelings and wordplay.. i read it allowd and the flow was great ... loved it
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12-06-03, 09:00 PM | #8 | ||||||
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IP: 39DA 7C7D
That was A Nice Drop....One Of The Better Ones.........The Chorus Was Tight Kuz.......The Verses Flowed Nicely.......they cam hard......U Used Nice Vocab......Nothing Really Wrong With It....Except the Long Read But I Didn't Mind It ......10/10 Fo It Keep That Shit Droping Kuz That was Tight As A Mother Fuka Peace (v)
-{/]~{Ú§kÍ}~[\}- |
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12-06-03, 11:45 PM | #9 | |||
A King Missing a Queen...
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IP: 8D7B 43DF
Thanks hommies,
Ive been trying to elevate, guess im doing it right... LOL Much love, and if anyone wants me to peep there flows, Just put the link in here. I aint got no problem doing so. You took your time to read and type a replie to mine, so i will do the same... Aight hommies, UPPIN OUT -High Class a.k.a Confusion
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12-07-03, 12:15 AM | #10 | ||||
Word.
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IP: 9C1E 2B43
Yeah i agree this was a pretty good piece here...like Uski said the chorus was nice, i liked it...your flow in this seem pretty good, it stayed on point i thought as i read through this...it was a long read, but it was worth it i think....overall this was a good piece...keep at it.
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12-07-03, 12:32 AM | #11 | ||||||
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Dat Was Dope Man 10/10 Mah Bestfriends Girl Even Thinks Its Off Tha Hook
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12-07-03, 12:57 AM | #12 | |||||||
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Yo kuz u were always one to flow from yo heart. da kourse wen nicly, da flow waz rippin, an da emotion put in tops diss off wit a 9/10... hella tight kuz, Keep it krakin yo.
Pea¢e (\1/) 050 5^ |
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12-07-03, 01:03 AM | #13 | |||
A King Missing a Queen...
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IP: 8D7B 43DF
Thanks for tha love hommies. Its much appriciated. and street soljah tell that girl " Sup Ma, thanks for the opinion." Yea, I always spit straight for the heart, nothin fake. Thanks again hommies.... UPPIN
OUT -High Class a.k.a Confusion
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12-07-03, 01:38 AM | #14 | |||
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IP: 8D7B 43DF
Uppin For Some Replies on This...
OUT -High Class a.k.a Confusion
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12-07-03, 01:41 AM | #15 | ||||||
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yo this was dope... your a fucking genius....
it almost never fell of flow, you lyricism was great (multies, internals, vocab), you had some pure emotional wordplay in there, and an element of storytelling... your hook fits in perfectly, and sounds great when reading out loud... some of my fav bars: You touch me with words, that ive only read in the Bible Our love will go bridle, with-out you, im known as suicidle Is to check my poems, letters, and notes of forgive-ness With-out you by my side baby, My time on earth is Sense-less... We will meat soon, finally after this long time, in the same room But im always there, consider me the sun and the moon .. if 50 cent saw this and realised how badly it shits over 21 questions, he'd shoot himself nine times you should show this to your girl, she'd love it 9.5/10 |
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