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Dedicated to all the fucks who think I'm wacked.........................



Right when I was about to use a razor unrationally
or take too many tantrum reducing pills radically
I found myself fishing around a websight known as MP3
and found a sooting rap song that stuck with me as I went to sleep
and in my serene state of REM, something special happened
I tossed and turned, but it was worth it 'cause I knew I could do that
I fuckn' fidgited fighting the fact that I had found passion
possessing the pen, provide me with rhymes, so I can zap'm
emcee's emulate every aspect of an old fashioned rhyme
but I scribble my own scriptures for the fuckn' use of frying
any idiot indicating the stage has got me crying
question the quest, i quench my fists hoping you will gimme a try

so I think i have found my passion (passion)
so i am going to start rapping (rapping)
nothing can stop me 'cause i can hack it
fuck you all, I'll bust you with a damn racket

suicidal incidents come to me in fuckn' great amounts
seducing to sex, no smoking on the train? fuck that goddamn shit
look at me light up, like me 'cause I'm a lung destroying chick
is this what i have to do to make you like my fuckn' face?
this havic of a heroin having highschool has got me pained
look at the lame preppies playing their fuckn' annoying games
I'll take that goddamn vollyball form it's fuckn' showcase
paint a face on it and give it to the man without a face
now he's got a fuckn' friend, focus on the flaws in this man
'cause chaos creeps in the gitty girl who can relate, I'm a fan

so I think i have found my passion (passion)
so i am going to start rapping (rapping)
nothing can stop me 'cause i can hack it
fuck you all, I'll bust you with a damn racket

Rising right out of this wreched shell, I'll throw bombs at people now
would do twenty to two-hundred battles a day, if it was allowed
but no, we can only do two or we'll be disqualified
don't donate drags in cigarrettes or else you'll be fuckn' tried
courts are waiting for consequences to come up, raps can serve time
each rap of mine will serve eight to ten years for fuckn' man slaughter
killing many guys in this goddamn game gatsby, i get hotter
and they jail you for the stupidest things like fuckn' murder
crying in your confided cell, rapping like your fuckn' not sure
workn' a worked rhyme sweat all day and all night sometimes
cold sweats always make their way in you when you've done some kind of crime
look at my long damned drawn out lines, fuck the pickets, i'll break the signs

so I think i have found my passion (passion)
so i am going to start rapping (rapping)
nothing can stop me 'cause i can hack it
fuck you all, I'll bust you with a damn racket

..nice..alot better than your other post I read earlier..lot of emotion involved..I like that..good job..peace...holla back on my piece~

thanks for feedback..... lets get more.............................................. .................................................. ............

i agree this was an improvement... the scheme tho could still be improved... in places it was basic... but ya got the topic over nicely... and had a decent flow to it.... quite decent here.....pZ

thanks for the feedback............ uppin for more..............

common people........i reply to all your shit........leave a link or the name of your shit and i will give ya feedback.........

tha flow at tha jumpoff was off. but overall it was a good piece