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Life Conquest (deep/thought process)
IP: 6236 079F
I’m on a life conquest//
Trying to do my best, to overcome the stress// Musically I have been blessed// Lacking encouragement from everyone I know// Gaining the strength to succeed and over-through// Anyone who decides to walk in front of my path// Never looking back, subtracting the doubtful like math// I’m ready to engage in kombat, let them witness my wrath// Expressing self through lyrics in every track// As I lay them out, right before their eyes// It’s the cowards like that, in whome I despise// See the world through my eyes// And you’ll never want to see again// You’ll want to be blind, cause my life you can’t comprehend// Don’t try to defend// Cause your not perfect, as you claim to be// This I gurentee// Speaking now, or forever hold your peace// In the end, we’re all deceased// Praying to god, to hear my cries// Constant sleepless nights, he never seems to reply// A tears drips from my eyes// Thinking about lost loved ones, as I long for him to hear me// So much shit on my mind, that I can’t think clearly// Hoping that he will guide me and get me through// Trials and tribulations of a different brew// The situations and circumstance from which I am loosing grip// I observe myself as I begin to slip// Over the edge of the cliff// Now I may not flow like you guys on here but here's some deep thought....to process... |
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IP: DF7B C8F7
work on your structure and youll elevate alot.
and it was flowing well at the begging but it faded a bit at the end, appart from that it was good. when you have a hundred posts drop an honest vote on my battle. vote my battle @ http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=105618
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IP: 5AF5 5CA5
didnt like the scheme ya used,,, too basic.... and the flow was off.... carry the rhymes further... and work on complexity.... pZ
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IP: C1DA C961
i agree with them ^^^ the concept was tight, and i like what u had goin, but work on the flow and u got a tight verse, nothin to worry bout just keep elevatin.... other than that nice drop man
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my rhymes heatin up the track got u meltin like an icicle this kid aint even old enuf to drive, whats he doin thuggin on his bicycle?! Merked: NyZ GrIncH(5-1), dUrAsTiK(5-1), mcsnypa03(5-0 DQ) |
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