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Old 01-16-04, 01:15 AM   #1
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a quick keystyle..
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Im sittin here thinkin am i really worth it
im a speck in this huge world should i for-fit
i look to the truth, my heart, for some answers
and this is what i got a tip like topless dancers
i relized if i try i have at least a chance to make it
if i die i might as well juss forget bout it and face it
ive always been true to my self its to late to fake it
im a gunnabe not a wannbe and haters' i can shake it
but i am not gonna ruin it by doin some stupid shit
i mean i looked in the past but the future, ill finish it
but am i worth it...
yes thats the question i have so many answers for
i wont look anywere else sept me shut ya out nd lock the door
too bad if i lose pull a Aliyah and "pick myself up and try again"
i wont quit, never in my life, there is no way ya gunna win
ill conquer you, this time ill go big, and i refuse to go home
i left for a reason a dream i will not stop till i reach my goal
but am i worth it...
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Old 01-16-04, 02:25 AM   #2
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some feedback please
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Old 01-16-04, 01:33 PM   #3
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uppin jeexz this shit iz fucked lol
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Old 01-16-04, 01:35 PM   #4
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a little basic in terms of vocab, although there was a good message in this piece and i liked the repetition of "but i am worth it", you should add some multis and work on some creative imagery. mayeb come with a full track next time.


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Old 01-16-04, 02:44 PM   #5
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..this seemed like it needs lot of work..first your vocab was too simple..at times simplicity works just fine..but..this was not the case..and I agree with ^..you had too many repetive lines..keep on writing..you can only get better..
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Old 01-16-04, 02:48 PM   #6
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it wasnt great but it didnt suck you should update the vocab and look for an original topic you got ill potential just keep posting son
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Old 01-16-04, 03:38 PM   #7
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Yeah this was ok....this was ok for a keystyle.....just try adding some better multies to your next pieces....up the vocab like people said before....try to fix up the structure a bit as well....but this was ok...just work on your things and you will get it...keep at it.
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Old 01-18-04, 09:17 PM   #8
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alrighty keep the feed back goin
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