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Old 01-23-04, 05:06 PM   #1
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My Philosophy

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open your eyes and go blind so you can understand
that in the snow, signs can be as hard to see as land
on pirate ships or flying saucers, or within me
the only thing that I've determined is that I love Sophy
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She's everything you can imagine but won't out of fear
everything thats great and tragic in the eyes of a seer
like the eyes in the rear of a first grade teacher's head
that peer and comprehend and choose to ignore instead
looking back, staring forth, or fifth or sixth or seventh
cause the numbers are unending in a premature heaven
that you're immersed in, submerged in all thats harmony
secluding yourself, or shooting yourself in the arm to see
if the pain is actually, sort of like a pinch but escalated
wake up from the dream to find you're actually sedated
and realise that Sophy has gotten really out of hand
even though you love her, you have to admit she's mad
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and the barren waste land that ensued left me bereft
when all I cared about was gone, what was there? death?
but that would let her win, destroying what was left of me
but what am I supposed to do without my philoSophy?
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Old 01-23-04, 05:15 PM   #2
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nice peice
very good flow and it was very consistant, and nice concept.

drop a vote please
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108195
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Old 01-23-04, 05:21 PM   #3
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Damn. . I See You N Skiddz Are Having A Little Comp. . And I Must Say You Edged Him By Just The Content. . The Story Told. . As Small As It Was. . Was Very Dope. . Loved How You Played On The Name And Said You Loved Sophy. . Maven Is A Philosophy Fucker. . Heh. . Content Was Dope. . Vocab Was Great. . Multi's Were Good When Present. . Everything Just Meshed. . And This Piece Turned Out Ill . . Great Work Man. . Pz.

that you're immersed in, submerged in all thats harmony
secluding yourself, or shooting yourself in the arm to see
if the pain is actually, sort of like a pinch but escalated
wake up from the dream to find you're actually sedated
and realise that Sophy has gotten really out of hand
even though you love her, you have to admit she's mad
^ ^ ^ DOPE Part. . Trust. . Highly Ill.


http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=109230 Feedback Appreciated.
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Old 01-23-04, 05:59 PM   #4
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i thought the way you worded it was good, it seemed to fall into place necely, the scheme wasnt to elaborate, but was carried well... yeah a good well thought out drop... but why da you guys center ya verses,,,,.... return the favour... for a change....
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Old 01-23-04, 11:43 PM   #5
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Damn. . I See You N Skiddz Are Having A Little Comp. . .


yeah...topical battle on rm

thanks for the feed, I'll definitely hit your piece.
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Old 01-24-04, 09:14 AM   #6
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You Slut!!
Dammit!!!!!! Just when I think I CAN win, here you come dropping these amazing pieces...Damnit!!!
But nonetheless, Good drop
Your flow was very good, The ending was dope, I'd never even think of the name inside the word. Many nice lines added to the imagery of the piece, Much useful vocabulary to add to the effect of the words. Dope piece.
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