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01-31-04, 09:51 AM
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My Lyfe [part 2]
IP: 07E0 A9F2
Did it end to my liking, exciting and full of vigour
Fighting with the world… living on a faulty trigger And has it configured to deliver all that I expected? Or have a messed it, was it contested… was I a winner A blatant sinner?… well here’s the story so far… 24, banned for drink driving… now I aint got a car My family disowned me for fighting with my pa So ‘a stroll in the park’ don’t really coin my phrase Cos its dark and im heading for the midnight space I can’t erase the past, but it contrasts to a sealed case Locked, blocked and binded… a finished race That I replaced with the present… with fucking ease Didn’t have to dirt its knees, begging saying please I was relieved to conceive an end to that chapter Because I didn’t deceive… it was spawned from laughter Flip’d n read wrong exploding… an un-natural disaster Spreading faster than a rash infecting my family So ive drawn a line under, and labelled it… Tragedy |
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01-31-04, 10:19 AM
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IP: 1B3B C284
This was a nice drop...nice structure...good flow...good descriptions...I Felt this was better in some points then Part 1...because it grasped me a little more...your vocab was good...i liked the concept...very good work...keep it up
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01-31-04, 10:44 AM
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IP: 399E F0FD
ok t6his piece was nice its juss ur flow was off..
u had nice description juss work on flow.... |
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01-31-04, 12:44 PM
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IP: 5AF5 5CA5
flow was off...lol.....ok....
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01-31-04, 03:35 PM
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Banned: Spamming
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IP: 399E F0FD
this was nice as aways..so I'm gonna up it for you..freeposting!!!!!!!!
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01-31-04, 04:06 PM
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IP: 5AF5 5CA5
LOL............ poster of!!!!
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01-31-04, 04:10 PM
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IP: 5AF5 5CA5
the FREE........LOL
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01-31-04, 05:56 PM
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IP: 5AF5 5CA5
this aint a free post.... upp....lol.....
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01-31-04, 06:01 PM
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IP: E7CB E3DC
yo wasup homie..drop was strait fire, the vocab, wordplay, rhyme, flow was there..evrything was there homie..overall the drop was flame, keep doin ur thang
Peace return de favorhttp://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=111182
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01-31-04, 07:00 PM
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IP: 5AF5 5CA5
ill hit yours when i got time.... but thx......
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02-02-04, 07:00 AM
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IP: 6F9E F23B
feed me!
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02-02-04, 07:21 AM
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IP: 64C2 D7B2
Like the rhyme sceme u used. ALso like the feelin i got from readin it, could hear the beat in my head and see myself in it...so I guess that mean you had some tight imagry. Sounded real, like shit came from deep inside ya nah mean?
If you have time peep my audio collab with UnderRated in 'Songs' forum. Should be close to the top. Thanks man |
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