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Old 02-04-04, 08:38 AM   #1
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Spittin

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most of ya'll need to quit can't you see the signs/
my lines out WRAP ur rhymes crawl down ur back and break ur spine/
i'm dope like a dealer call me aka weapon concealer/
packin more than guns in my draws now tell me whose realer/
i can spit a rap/ flip it back/ make ur eyes spin all in the same trak/
tell me what i lack you'll say sumtin' dumb/ or maybe the truth but i shit u more than the runs/
i stay won (one) battle losses confuse me/ cuz' u can abuse me more than a church family/
my stamina remains to be at a high/ sigh in relief do it twice and u might die/ i don't lie, i can't, but i can cuss/
fuck, shit, ass, bitch so many dirty word's can give ya a head rush
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Old 02-04-04, 10:24 AM   #2
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Yo, if you just get ya structure on que, you might have potential.. Its was a good lil quick read, think it went off a lil at the end, but good stuff.. Keep elevating, everyone is always elevating no matta what status they are..
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Old 02-04-04, 10:43 AM   #3
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A dont like these type of OM...

They seem to me... That they dont belong in here... Its not what a would class as a OM...

You need to work on your structure... Sort out your flow aswell...
Also need to use a wider range of vocabulary... This wasnt very complex at all... Sort that out...

Wasnt feelin this verse at all... As a said... Dont like self-glorification verses... Find them pointless... Played...

Try a interesting topic...

Pz
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Old 02-04-04, 11:05 AM   #4
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Its str8 I liked it to a extent holla at me
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