Street lights

A night of tossing and turning...
...almost absent of sleep
Nerves upturned knowing in the morning
...he will finally drop to the single knee
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wow...sori but thas all i can say is wow...i mean damn...thas sum shit...wow...and it even rhymed...wow...::speechless::....much much much respect

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Every lil boi is born shi......their ignorance makes them bold......

simply put"...wise words whisperd to deaf ears as no one hears the blurred proverbs that're always spoken clear so i fuckin swear that my where wont be here as time tolls..." second verse of 'Elevate' written by -shi-

Thank you

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Nice read Chrit... It housed much emotion, as I could feel each and every one convey'd through him. Very real,very grasping, yet a nice sutle flow to keep your spirits up with. Great job and I know you had fun doing this, it's one of those peices that seem like it is written without interuption. Like if you just put the pen down and didnt stop till finshed. I liked this alot, so raw, and what a great message to put out thier. Too many are in need of this message.


The structure fucked with my high Dawg, you know how that is...,

Great Job,
~Bounce~

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OMG... damn damn damn
this was.. I can't even find words to label it
everything was on point, you portrayed the emotion perfectly, kept the flow right, rhyming, deep, you brought me into the story. Real talented need i say the least. This was truly amazing. Keep writin.

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Poetry
Don't Look Into My Eyes Forgotten
Understanding Once Again
"It requires wisdom to understand wisdom:
the music is nothing if the audience is deaf."

I love you all....

Maybe thats the alcohol talkin

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wow, firstly..i did not know that Trapt Wit was Chrit! how you doing son? now that little chat about record deals all becomes clear! *SLAPS HERSELF* Now that thats over with..coo poem, nice topic and illest emotion..

keep droppin, ignore my stupidity!

Damn..I havent read much from you but this was on point..I knew from the beginning, the tone was just so sweet, happy and promising, that something bad was going to happen..that it was too good to be true...I loved the imagery and the descriptiveness of this man's preparations only adds to the saddness felt in the end..You are a very talented writer, some lines of this I had to read over again because they were that intense.

"Senses overloaded, its like connection not meant to be started to spark
And then the phone drops, James looks up and honestly wishes he were Mark"

"Too emotionally drained to put the foot on the gas
Cant believe
...he lost love so shortly after accepting it at last"

Its so incredible and soooo sad at the same time..I can only hope it was fiction but either way, very captivating writing..Nice job..

damn, i think this is the first piece i've read from you here, but damn hopefully it wont be the last.this piece was so well built, everything was dead on, emotion, structure, vocab all of it, but mostly the emotion. all the detail and thought in this piece was what made that emotion so strong. you could tell something bad was going to happen, but still there was a twist, with his brother and all. i loved this.

~Tera~
DONT HATE

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