Do you think your a gangsta; Cause you probably a fukin wanksta;
You problay got a small D.I.C.K.; The size of a uza (uzi);
Mine is huge; Its way bigga then a damn A.K.;
Im a Gangsta in disguise; When I pop out and surpise;
All your little wanksta's;
So they run the hell away; Wit out a fukin Say;
I start to chase your gang; then you hear BANG;
All I saw; was your people startin to fall;
Then I smell; the scent of hell after u fell;
You try to get up; but you can't even say "sup";
I just left you to die; an All I said was Bye.

holy shit... u need to elevate..
no hate,, wouldn't want a white guy at my house
.. listen.. read a dictionary
your vocab sucks.. and
well your shit was a good topic but ur rhymes were just weak
like
i sat, on this mat
its BORING
neways good drop
for a newb


E-L-E-V-A-T-E

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^^what he said...and try and get a better structure...re-read your stuff...it might help you a lot...but keep at it peace

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Open Mics
The Weathers Art
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673
My Teenage Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850
Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461

wow...this....was...pure....shit.....now die....

Needs better rhymes (multies)
longer lines,
more flow
better voacb

and YEAH
ELEVATE

JamesJr.


Damn no wonder they think white people are wack

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Open Mics
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=112397
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=111729

2nd Battle NEEDS 4
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=111647
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=110858