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02-05-04, 06:42 PM
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Angles circle us
IP: 4287 3F49
In life, through the good and bad we are never alone for
Angels circle us From the worst decision 2 the ones that show to be ingenius Angels circle us Through the times we thought we wouldn't make it to the next day Angels circle us To the times we go to sleep early just to see the sun rise Angles circle us Now one thing is for certain for as long as we have a soul Angels circle us Yet is it because of these Angels our uprise or Demise? |
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02-05-04, 10:29 PM
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IP: 74A8 E5C9
nice little piece here
simplistic with a quick glance, but intriguing with an in-depth read and an attempt to understand, i've read plenty of pieces like this, but it still made me think no complaints, nice drop ^keepin it short
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02-06-04, 06:10 PM
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IP: 1B3B C284
really nice enjoyed how every verse had the same ending
simplistic but big in heart it's like an everyday thing i really question myself of those things keep posting |
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02-08-04, 08:42 PM
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Sharp Perfection.
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IP: 1B0F FD65
it was a simple put poem, with good thoughts, and thoughts shown well. the topic wasnt dragged out, and i thought the lenght was good, for repeating poems can get really boring it they are longer. it flowed well, but sounded really goo like a slow spoken piece, structure was good and vocab was basic. i thought the content was well written and wasnt choppy. nice work.
~Tera~ DONT HATE
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