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Old 02-14-04, 11:12 AM   #1
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Who Sayz I'm Not Able(hot as hell)

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Flow wit Carbon Monoxide straight on to the Dark Side
I'm the force that runs the course of a dark mind
Jedi's say the tricks a play are of a gods kind
A top crime, some say I can even stop time
From the heights of heaven to the depths of hell
I kept hyrogliphics, secrets of tibetan black spells
Tell the crop circle thesis better then Vinnie Paz himself
I can tell real from fake, i'm tellin 50 gassed himself
Flow is toxic, able to break the ozone layer
Angels and gods burned by my sin so don’t go prayer
Burn the holey scripts, those so called ‘readings of ours’
I ain’t carve in the faces, I destroyed the beings on mars
Breathe all your breathes and make all of your deaths
Replace Jesus and Allah wit Jae before all of you rest
Spit life in to tombs and spit death in ta churches
I’ve re-written the bible, my text in that version
I've out smarted the phrophecies of a mothman
Rite no your witnessin the hypothesies of a dark man
But c'mon I can really be a showman
I've showed that when i've showed men I destroyed the Ancient Romans
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Old 02-14-04, 12:39 PM   #2
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Old 02-14-04, 07:19 PM   #3
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This was alright here.....the structure was good i thought...maybe could be fixed up a bit in a few places though but it was ok.....the flow seemed to be alright.....had some good vocab in there....You had some nice multies as well, liked that....overall a alright piece, liked the read.
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