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03-04-04, 11:23 AM | #1 | |||||||
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Makem understand
IP: 1795 802E
yo, i flow for the power of the people;
captivating minds and anticapting like a sequel. get checked in da jaw bigger dan a seagals/ you know how da deal rolls in this life sold; to the devil, a.k.a uncle sam and i'm da rebel/ starting a revolution wit a lot of a bass and treble/ never shall we rest until freedom is expressed/ fast food making us feel distressed torn in between da chest/ don't mess wit a man's quest, beeep, dis is a test/ know matter wat the endevour holds, i'm here givin yall cushion like dr sholls/ who knows more lines dan da riddler dropping mad rymes/ front page l.a times i'm still in my prime like dinasours roming da earth/ for billions of years i'm out for the next rebirth of the chosen one/ yes dat be me, golden son of an imigrant that unfolds the hell bent/ so far, i feel like i'm heaven sent, dats it, time to pay da rent/ |
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03-07-04, 11:38 PM | #2 | ||||
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IP: 522A 016B
This was alright man....you seem to be getting better, elevating a bit man...had some decent metas in there....structure could be fixed up a bit, some of your lines were stretched out towards the end which threw the flow off a bit but it was ok...keep at it.
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