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03-23-04, 02:51 AM | #1 | ||||
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LOST CHILD...(feedback)
IP: 0ABC 464B
I was a lost soul lost child stuck in this game//
loosin my mind goin crazy and I was fillin' insane// I loved my father and my brother and I still miss them so much// loss after loss cut me deeper than any knife could touch// I remember all them late night fights with four fives and knifes// and when my mans went to jail for twenty five to life// cause he had to rob that clerk in that liquor store hiest// he was almost like my brother and we was so damn tight// but my real brother was just another casulty of war// I should of went for milk I should of went to that store// It should of been me cathin' that bullett from the four// I could never forget that image of him layed out on the flour// and my dad I pray for, lost a case now he sittin' in jail// it hurts so much that D block is the letter on his cell// and we never saw him cause we couldnt afford bail// I hope he's found god cause I dont wanna see him in hell// one love........ |
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03-23-04, 02:52 AM | #2 | ||||
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IP: 6236 079F
feed back................
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03-23-04, 05:03 AM | #3 | ||||
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IP: 6236 079F
niggas never give me feedback man...................
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03-23-04, 11:09 AM | #4 | |||||||
Light Weight
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IP: 995C FBA1
yo its deep son but work on ya flow
topic touched me but you need some structure just feedin no beef peace
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03-23-04, 02:06 PM | #5 | |||||||
Banned: Cheating
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IP: 03C2 3387
That was great stuff! I am feelin' that. The flow and stuff were nice. The vocab could have been betta, but other than that it was really good. Keep droppin'.
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03-23-04, 05:06 PM | #6 | ||||
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IP: 3240 794D
I appreciate the feedback.....
cause its hard to git feedback in here... one love....... |
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03-23-04, 07:44 PM | #7 | |||||||
Flyweight
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IP: C1DA C961
yo dat shit was deep son i like it, it was hot
i lost my brother 2 so i know how u feel and i dont even know my bitch azz popz .....oh yeah fucc g-unit101....rollin 30, folk nation
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03-23-04, 09:47 PM | #8 | ||||
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IP: C1DA C961
thanx for the feedback......
one love...... |
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