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Old 07-04-04, 04:46 AM   #1
PoEtIc JuStIcE
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ok...i am writing about..THE TWO TOWERS...i am Smegal/Gollum


alone at night, starlight, cursing i search...two little thieves
mystically drawn, not caring about the rustling of the leaves
the ring is my goal,blinded by envy and uncompromising greed
like a cat drawn to feed...i must cause these thieves to bleed
as i strike..unknowingly...hobbits sleep easy and i them awoke
quickly i am captured,i feel guilt as a sword is held to my throat
somethin trips in my head...a transition between good and evil...
strangely now calm and peacefull...why is this happening to smegal?
i feel unjustifiable sadness as the rope twists and burns.....
i just want to be set free..they are my friends..on them i wont turn..
i want them to trust me...yet i know im unrelliable..schitzofrenic
i long to be freed..from my alta ego..panic..and crazy psycho-manic
please..i know the way to moldor..i can lead you to the black gate
i want to help..avoiding treachury...i hope this journey isnt my fate...
alone trembling..hiding from the voice in my head....
get out of there i said..i want to be friend not foe instead..
drawn to the ring as they sleep..overcome with greed i rise to my feet
but fight i must...i can conquer this lust..and im not about to be defeat
painfull scornfull fight,...but mentally this pain is deep in my head..
i long to get rid of...this time i only just manage to overcome the dread..
what do i want...who is stronger..am i gollumn?..or smegal???...
well that debate could go on foreva..like EM or Royce?..bad or evil?
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Old 07-04-04, 04:47 AM   #2
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DROP sum honest feedback on this piece.......................
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Old 07-04-04, 05:35 AM   #3
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shit was pretty good man nice drop
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Old 07-04-04, 07:26 AM   #4
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upin sum feed
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Old 07-04-04, 11:55 AM   #5
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nice good job keep it up
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Old 07-04-04, 12:47 PM   #6
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nice job on this... I saw it already in the battle against LE- you both came pretty nice, props to you for only just having seen the movie---- and Dons sig is dope... 1
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Old 07-04-04, 02:29 PM   #7
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Nice spit mate come tight in this topical.
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Old 07-06-04, 03:29 AM   #8
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Nice spit dawg gl in our battle..............
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Old 07-16-04, 04:38 AM   #9
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that's hot way to go
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Old 07-17-04, 04:01 AM   #10
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that was really good
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Old 07-17-04, 04:11 AM   #11
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ay feelin dat liked da way u used both parts of da character...most def a hott drop
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Old 07-17-04, 11:04 AM   #12
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gollums tha shit boy....i can do his voice so u know im down....any thing wit him is tha best...
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