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Old 07-10-04, 05:45 AM   #1
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Lightbulb Best Night Of My Life

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Ima tell yall about sum shit that went down last year prolly the best night of my life hear me out...

(Verse)
September 1st 2003/
Shit in reality jus another normal day for me/

Woke up and there was a text on my phone/
I remembered givin her my number...
...she asked if i wanted to go to her home/

She broke up wit her ex the night before last i was there to hear it/
I heard she liked me but that werent the reason...
...fact is he treated her like shit/

People could see we clicked...and there was a spark/
I couldnt believe i didnt notice her feelings...
...even when she showed me her birthmark/

It was in a particular area...but i wont say where/
Back to the story i replied back...
...sayin what time should i be there?/

She said come round about 7 my parents are going out/
I need sum company...
...and only u know what im about/

I tried callin her but she werent respondin/
She text dont call i get nervous...
...ur voice starts me gigglin/

So we text all day while the hours past/
I looked at the clock only an hour?...
...why aint the day goin fast?/

Finally 7 came i was at the door my mind constantly thinkin/
I knocked she answered come in watcha drinkin?/

I stood back amazed she dressed up for me...
...but then again we both we lookin smart/
She looked real beautiful...
...i could feel her taking my heart/

We sat in the living room and spoke as we watched sum T.V/
Then i felt her hand reach over startin to touch me/

I responded back the same my heart set on fast beats/
She pulled me over...her head on my lap in the same seats/

My hand was stroking her fine hair What Women Want was on/
I thought nows my chance please dont word it wrong/

I whispered in her ear I know what u want V/
She smiled and said what then...
...i told her u want me/

Then we kissed and our relationship was spawned/
9 months later...our Baby Ethan was born...
...and we still going strong/
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furthermore, june 3rd is the only good day to be born

^ Amen Brother ^

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i'm still tryin to figure out how bein born in another country makes somebody fake.

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Old 07-12-04, 03:35 AM   #2
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upin this
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furthermore, june 3rd is the only good day to be born

^ Amen Brother ^

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i'm still tryin to figure out how bein born in another country makes somebody fake.

R.I.P OMB

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Old 07-12-04, 03:40 AM   #3
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shieet mayun that was nyce

yo check mah open mic put sum feedback
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Old 07-12-04, 04:01 AM   #4
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dont come at my hammi like that (z villian)

that was hard respect, my heart came to you on that one...

...producing a baby is the only fulfilling thing that you can ever do, you take this one with a 10/10..


great solid story, good lines, flow was very nice, worplay and the closure was "strong"

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Old 07-12-04, 05:17 AM   #5
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Thanks a lot dawg that means a lot im uppin this again yall
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furthermore, june 3rd is the only good day to be born

^ Amen Brother ^

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i'm still tryin to figure out how bein born in another country makes somebody fake.

R.I.P OMB

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Old 07-12-04, 09:20 AM   #6
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wow man, that shit was hot dawg... great story line and fun to read.. flow was good, real nice man i like that shit..

I stood back amazed she dressed up for me...
...but then again we both we lookin smart/
She looked real beautiful...
...i could feel her taking my heart/

nice verse right there man, real nice... that was my favorite one in it.

good spit
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Old 07-12-04, 09:58 AM   #7
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It Was Aight..

Your Vocab and Multi/Flow Isnt All There...But You GOt The StoryLine Down...Just Need To Add The Emotion and Word Usuage To Your Advantage.

Good Job Though...6.5/10

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Old 07-12-04, 10:47 AM   #8
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I really feel the story to this, you can tell it really means somethin to you--- good piece here i like it.... Keep on climbin... 1
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Old 07-12-04, 07:05 PM   #9
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dayumm that was nice yo
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Old 07-14-04, 08:44 AM   #10
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awww..i like the way this shit was told..putting something as personal as that is alwayz interesting to read..could ov done with a bit more detail you know..shit like..getting dressed b4 going there..trying all diffrent outfits on and that..im sure u see where im cumin from..anyway it was a nice piece hope to see more from you in the future
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Old 07-16-04, 05:57 AM   #11
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props...postin personal shit on here,takes guts...

in woz a nice drop.....
sum raw emotion,nice depth to it....gud flow n nice use of multies
keep it up
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Old 07-16-04, 06:05 AM   #12
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could sumone drop a vote on dis 2 plz..........

http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=135238

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Old 07-16-04, 06:11 AM   #13
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that was raw 8.5/10
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Old 07-18-04, 07:33 PM   #14
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Thumbs up inside stuff

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undefined hey that was sum romantic stuff ,made my ass wonder for a minute but that was just sum stuff u feel inside.

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Old 07-18-04, 07:38 PM   #15
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props to you for postin that, not bad either!!
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