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Mafia Chick, this was really good. I liked reading it. The writing was very simple and to the point but had good meaning in it, at least to me. I enjoyed how you compared 2 peoples lives together, one being a good life, and the other being not so good. Some writings don't really have any feeling to them, or emotion I guess you could say. This one had plenty. Makes me think either you been in this situation or seen it up close. All I can say is keep your head up and continue writing.

yo thats offical but is it factual or metaphorical?

its metaphorical

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that was sick, nice way getting ya point across ya thought well put down the creativeness u had made the story alot better to read the whole lay-out the real life thought u put down was like WOW u had made time to really think about this one huh?? but i loved this one alot nicely done....

9.5 outta 10

keep droping them....

are u a poet or just a rhymer who just thought of this idea and had a real impact on thoughts that u wrote...

thanks and yeah i really thought this one thur
i just write shyt that come to mind thats all

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damn kidd dat was hott..most definatley feelin that drop...very simple and to da point
keep dat shyt comin iight peace