hav u ever wanted to kill sumone for the shit they start
u can't get it out of ur head, not even out of of heart
it like if they could jus keep there mouth shut
they start to stare so u look and say ''WHAT''
it's amazing how 1 person can mak ur life hell
but when people ask me how i am i smile and say swell
people act like they don't care what people say
but behind peoples back they cry inside evryday
u hurt inside but theres a smile on ur face
u see sum1 popular and wish u could take there place
seein then with there better life
a whole family sister, brother, husband, and wife
it not like my life is the worest, it not that bad
itz jus really fucked up i don't have a real dad
so remeber before u bring sumone down
they might have on a smile but insides its a frown

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So what chicks can rap too/
you just won't battle me cause i can beat u/

Respect List:
AKA (down, and keepin it real)
KoObOo (A true friend wouldn't be the right words)
The Disciple (mmmm Tight probbly wouldn't be the word) lol
Tony Montana (thiz my main boi for rapping)
Ciara Myst (hey if u cant beat em', join em')
phatom (he jus got skill)
LivenLegend ( thiz my friend for life)
fluidmoon (she got ova half ya'll beat)

wow, well,i liked it , a little intense but its good, i like how you put emotion into your things, the last line i think you could do alot wit well the last two lines
"so remember before u bring sumone down
they might have on a smile but insides its a frown"

that you could play off of alot , not as strong as i would have liked to see it vocab wise, but again it was the emotion that comes through when you read it
nice keep em comin