jus a quick thing..jus felt like rappin
ima jus keep goin till I get tired...
rap kinda slow on this one...
all this shit true
i got no reason to front

I know i'm not meant for here...my kind is different
too these niggas i see them leer...they lookin down
on me like they veiw my as mere...

I hold no fear...to those who purposley invade my space...
tryin to intimadate...
thinking I can't hold my own because of my body weight...
everyday look at my face...it never changes shape...
I never smiled ever since the burb air I taste...
all the money is spent on the home appraised...
so I must stay here they say...thoughts of running away...
though i never made it passed my lawn...
I touch the grass..turn around..thinkin bout what would
my parents do if i was gone...

two years ago my one thought i had was only a female...
now i'm baically only on my Dale...reeranging words...
thinkin of combinations of the words I spell...some say "no life"...
at least now I see my days in a new light...
if you don't understand, my man at least try to veiw you
and your life through a new insight....

I apolgize if I didn't apply with your issue...
I wish i can solve your ploblem but this is only
the trals I been through...maybe soon
someone will understand and I can have a mentor...
High School sent me to a coucler...no help was givin...
all he did was spit sayings he didn't bearely listen...
the only homie I trusted...the only nigga I adjusted...
is the one nigga I know that went to prison....
I don't wanna live through my life as another menace...
I take out my aggression on all of my printin's


ok
I need to know if I got Talent or not
cuz if I don't then this isn't for me...

BE HONEST cuz I don't wanna waste my time
on RV if i'm hittin a brickwall with rap here...

ps.

Thank you all of Rapverse.com
for helping me reach the level i'm at at least
I've gotten much betta then when I 1st arrved here

even the niggas I beefed with


it's been real!!!

~1~

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how do 11 people read this, but none actually reply?

uppin for some

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please

please

please
please

crit

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god damn

all my open mics never get ANY feedback

WHAT-SO-EVER

can some one please jus tell me how was it?

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man yer in ma crew dope dope dope i liked yer cerse it had flow and complex vocab to i liked it man but it needs more time put into creativity on metas n shit 8/10
check out my openmic in ma sig

this was nice man .. good vocab ..had some personal views on shit .... good flow.............. 7/10............

repey the favour man .... http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=150419
pz

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Im A Throwback

uppin

Real

ima return the favor right now

I beleive if you care about yo music that much
to type it out and post it
I should at least read it right?

E jus critted yours

peace

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I wasnt feeling your voacab...But I liked the picture it painted 7/10 Uppin for pro

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