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Murders in mass amount's taking lives of loved ones noone can live without'
Babie's stolen'5'finger'discounted, Rapes happen in various place's around'it
Kids being neglected with no love spread around em'its crap'
Makes me Vomit'Seeing babies bein slaughter by DRs,and the angels surroundin'thefact's

White-into-blacks, under everytrain track is a foundation'
What ever happend to god, its like we pushed him outta these situations'
Bombings and murder's shed blood off all races, Every nation'
Look at these suicide bomber people, taking there own lives, cuz its others lives they have taken'

All these children dying off abortion, What ever happend to the love and supportin'
Riped and tore them, all because the babies mom was whorin'
Never to see another life'was'aborted, all because a white powder was snorted
I know it's horrid', But thats the reality we live in, and the love that were warden'

Caution My brains under attack, taking feedback from rappers'that cant even act'
All this racism' against white rap, Im not black, but still feel and heal the same-ways
Im sorry my people fucked your nations'over'All because were white snob's and dont know how to take gods order'
All I can say, Is the kkk were bitches, Id love 2 see muhamad-ali' hit the ring leaders faces
Fuck there dome up no teeth'they need'braces, nooone should suffer the way them slaves did'
But all I know, is we all have brains...blood....heart...and a savior.....

Up this PLEASE FEEDBACK

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uppin' 4 feed

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shit was to basic...

I dont care if its "basic", I am talking about the concept and the words man....The vibe not the "texteeness"

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yo dawg look i do audio now used to do text an if you gonna to text its gotta be perfect an this was just to basic...

well look "dawg", I didnt ask 4 your life story I just want feed on the body of my lines. U know the concept....the word it brings 2 the people

THATS ALL....not no
"multis"
"metas"
"flow"
Just my word man....

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Wreckage, I enjoyed your piece. Forget about dodo birds who can't see the bigger picture, the fact the your rhyme had "content"( it said something.) A lot of the shit on this site is fluffy powder puff bullshit that has all the appearance of Deepness, but none of the power thereof... Shit that is overly deep and flowery, that aint sayin nothin , or if it is it's too coded to be understood and its like work-just to decipher it. There is a balance. But until this site finds it, I prefer pieces, like yours, not bogged down in 'over cerebral and flowery bullshit. So good drop, aight 1.

thanx raptor that was prolly the greatest exsplained feed... thanx man Uppin

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I thought this was good, i mean maybe if you upped ya vocab and worded afew things differently,...

but this was still a descent read, and who cares about what people think

IM TOLD IM WACK AND YA KNOW WHAT,,,,,,,, EVERY ONE WHO SAID THAT IS WORSE THAN ME AND IS PLAIN OLE JEALOUS






All these children dying off abortion, What ever happend to the love and supportin'
Riped and tore them, all because the babies mom was whorin'
That line sucked

I know a girl who got raped and pregnant at the same time,,, and she had an abortion cause why keep a kid that you only got cause you were raped...... I know this because she is a LESBIAN...........

Also my cousin got raped by her stepfather when she was 14,,,,,, DO you really think she woudl keep the KID..... I think not-------- other than that i thought this peace was pretty good,.....


Bombings and murder's shed blood off all races, Every nation'
Look at these suicide bomber people, taking there own lives, cuz its others lives they have taken'

I liked the creativity in that and it was pretty much on point.....

Overall i give this a 8-10

Peace

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thanx man uppin for feed Ill return the favor

Heh damn u peeps need 2 feed more....

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Heh.. Wasnt bad. Could use more wordplay, flow was 'ok' nothing great. You have potential and I did enjoy reading that drop for the most part. The idea was pretty good but its been done to death, it's always fun trying out new avenues of thought. Anyways 95% of the negative feedback you get is either dickriding (in battles) or people who dont like you for some odd reason or another or b/c you're better then they are. And 95% of those are under the age of 13 and I ignore them anyways. (you can pin point these young kids with there exsesive foul language, bitching, bad grammer). You'll rarely come across true feedback where someone speaks their mind about your peice and leave good in-depth suggestions to you. Peace.

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thanx man.....Thats sum tru feed Uppin

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yo homie i see alot of sceptics in this bitch but nothin good comin out of em.
so who r they to even critisize us i like this peace it makes u think about all tha shit thats goin on.
Positive comments only help us grow so keep that shit up, i can only hope more people write tha real n not tha fake

lookin for feedback on my pieces
it would be appreciated (Open Mic) Fly Dyme + Tho times r hard
Peace

thanx man uppin

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