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09-28-04, 12:41 AM | #1 | |||
Banned: Cheating
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tryout for the council!!
IP: CF32 7C8F
heres one battle
most of dez thugz is hoes/ havin victoria secret up in there assholes/ poison is fucking wack/ he likes to get T-Bagged with a nut sack/ only thing u can do in yo rhymes is studder/ ill do this rap smooth like when i boned yo mother/ this aint a movie quit hideing like the other(S)/ u and fiyaspitta act alike are u related to one another/ ill leave no evidence in this rap/ only thing im leavin is bullets from my strap/ ill defeat u like a babeality/ here dog step back into reality and heres another k this is round 2 im gonna spit first so fuck you/ u rap retarded/ so yo ass is getting bambarted/ u stink i think someone in here jus farted/ damn 2 battles and 2 wins for me/ im to good for u cant ya see/ im like muhammad ali cuz i float like a butterfly and sting like a bee/your ass is getting gradded in raps so u get a D/ fuck a punchline all u getting is my knee/ this rap is gonna cost ya maybe a dollar or three/ this niggas IP is 3D/1 so u know he cant see me hes still trippin of dat E/ so im gonna leave it like this let him be/ |
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09-28-04, 07:49 AM | #2 | ||||
E-Style, Bitch.
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IP: 24A3 0EF0
....Im not bein a dickhead, or trynna beef or oofend you
but 'm pretty sure unless you step ya game up u wont be joinin the council..
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09-28-04, 07:57 AM | #3 | ||||||
THE COUNCIL
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IP: 95FF 1D86
Nothing wrong with say'n no, it's just the opposite of yes. Just call it how it is, and thats all ya do'n there /\ /\ /\
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09-28-04, 08:05 AM | #4 | |||
Skadoosh!
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IP: D1BF FA16
need to improve..................
STRUCTURE - lines are all over tha place. FLOW - work on ure structure and u'll see how ure flow comes together. RHYMES - all nice rhymin, but its all basic, get more complex cuz basic rhymin will only get u wins against herbies. CREATIVITY - punches and personals are all gud and shit, but try sumthin more creative, if u gone diss someone, use metas and shit for it, or links, or wordplay better. just a few helpful handy tips.................... and dont argue...................... CUZ THE JUDGE & JURY HAVE DECIDED..............AND THEIR DECISION IS FINAL!!!! |
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09-28-04, 09:54 AM | #5 | |||
Banned: Biting
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IP: BE74 FCEB
i am in a crew but i just wanted to see if id be good enough if i was thinking of leaving...... here ya go.
homie you never doin nuttin but stealin/ bLiNkZ da type to dump all ya nerves in ya stomach and give you a gut feelin/ I'll lynch you on topic and really leave ya life hangin by a thread/ Even wit a brain transplant, you wouldn't get a head/ Everyone doubtin ya rhymes, bitch ur outta time/ I'll shove a book through ya brain and really read ya mind/ Look at ya verse set up it proves your a rambler, dont think i cant handle ya/ Face it, you never stood a chance like a paraplegic gambler/ Pop you by ya boys even ya Mans Will Twitch/ On Rap Verse you hold as much wieght as an Anerexic Bitch/ Dont get taped up and throwin in the Trunk Of The Car/ Im Doubling Viagra Perscriptions makin things harder then they Already Are/ bitch must have swollowed an ass the way shit be coming out of his mouth/ But I'll shove track shoes down ya throat so you can really Run Ya Mouth/ Last edited by bLiNkZ : 09-28-04 at 09:57 AM. |
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09-28-04, 10:23 AM | #6 | |||
Skadoosh!
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IP: D1BF FA16
u got potential, but i think personally that u need a bit more elevatin
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09-28-04, 07:23 PM | #7 | |||||
Light Weight
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IP: 0CE7 719F
check my linkz and holla...
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