THIS PIECE , I PERSONALLY THINK NEEDS MOR IMPROVEMENT, HOWEVER THIS IS WRITTEN DURIN MA SUFFERIN OF RITERS BLOK SO I WROTE THIS TO GET MY MIND JOGGIN

ONCE AGAIN .....PLENTY UPPINS PLEASE.............AN NO SHIT COMMENTS

EXPLAIN WHT U THOUGHT AN Y U THOUGHT AN HOW SHUD I IMPROVE

TO ALL PEOPLE WHO READ THIS LYRIC AN MA PREVIOUS ONES I'D LYK TO SAY THANK U FOR PUTTIN UP DA TYM AN EFFORT INTO READIN MA PEICES EVEN IF THEY MAY NOT BE VERY GOOD , THIS PIEACE IS ALSO TO KEEP MA ELEVATION GOIN.............LOL ONLI ONE YEAR IN THE GAME......IM TRYIN

The world were livin in, Things aint the same
There used to be freedom, Now the world has changed
Pain - Anger - Guilt wipe the streets of this earth
Ruling under states - Young mothers givin birth
Babies bein born with no will to live
No freedom, No peace - Gats, Roamin da streets
Another gun shot, Another one dead
Ganja, Weed, Pot filling systems in our head
The world as we know it, Is fallin apart
Violence - Bloodshed, Weave their way in our hearts
Everyday is the same, No Work, No Gain
Illiterate ones scream to express their pain
We can try to turn a cheek and create a change
But no matta how hard - Things will neva be the same


Evil got us captivated hopin for a sign
A vision, or a wish, As we pray in our mind
The plead from a new born as it enters this life
To part from humanity - Revisit the light
The world aint the same as it used to be
No gatherings, No peace - Ment for you or me
A sign is what i hope for in the long term range
A turn of the page, New future - New change


Moral used to be all for 1, 1 for all
No one gives a toss, in isolation we fall
watchin were we cross and guard our baks
Piecing life together from the reocurring cracks
Media got us driftin with the tides of propaganda
Lies in our minds, And some times we wonder
Was life ment to be - Full of misery
But life is what we make it
People choose to give or take it
I hope for the horizon - Of a new change
Pray to god for help - And to ease the pain
A sign is sure to come when hardships flee
Makin life much betta for you and me
There's a time for everything , There's a time for change
Turn a new leaf - Things will neva be the same


Evil got us captivated hopin for a sign
A vision or a wish, as we pray in our mind
The plead from a new born as it enters this life
To part from Humanity - Revisit the light
The world ain't the same as it used to be
No gatherings, No peace, - Ment for you or me
A sign is what i hope for in the long time range
A TURN OF A PAGE , NEW FUTURE NEW CHANGE

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waitin for uppins plz...................thnks

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LaDy_T_aKa_LaDy_LyRiCaL

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that was some good shit lady t 8-10

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Mor Uppins Plz.................................

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LaDy_T_aKa_LaDy_LyRiCaL

" eVeRy LoSs Is A sTePpIn StOnE tO sUcEsS ! "

Mor Uppinz Plz........................im Startin To Hear Echoes In Dis Room Lol

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LaDy_T_aKa_LaDy_LyRiCaL

" eVeRy LoSs Is A sTePpIn StOnE tO sUcEsS ! "

there was a nice flow some good lyrics but i didn't get the point of it i thought the chorus was kinda wack but much props and the score is 6/10 sorry

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umm imma have to agree w/ both of 'em...didnt get da point of dis..but it was tiight..good wordplay..luved da flow..very creative..i think u should get at me about a collab sometime...good piece tho

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no hate aight, nothin like that. It just seems like a topic that has been touched on quite a bit, although you did do a good job. It's just that often what is good, is something that is original and different, you understand? Think of new concepts, and take things in a different direction. But overall this was a decent piece, keep at it.
give me an honest feedback, on my first open mic [linked in my sig] read all of it (prolly not as long as yours, but i just want it to be read all the way, in stead of skimmed through and then spoken on)

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