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10-19-04, 01:06 AM
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What Happened?
IP: 88C4 C811
There was love here before, how did it dissapeer? Wonderin why you use that tone of voice, confused sittin here I ask you a question, I get sarcasm or nothing at all It just gets bigger and bigger like a rolling shitball I want you to trust me, but the feeling aint mutual Me coming back and you walking away has turned to the usual It's useless this bickering, where have we gotten? Relationship sour everything between us has gone rotten The friends say its a phase and that it happens all the time And youll be back to me again once I finish the rhyme I'm just balancing on a dime, hoping to stay afloat Balancing on the rhymes, hopin you read what I wrote This aint the usual "Oh I hate life." that you think im bringing This is real life feelings, and sadness what youre reading But blah its time for homework, I could careless whether people read All i hope is you payed attention, and can see what I see
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10-19-04, 02:57 PM
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New to RV
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IP: A713 E6BC
Very good flow.Vocab is decent. Good emotion.
Work a little on the vocab otherwise it is awesome. Great work.
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rap4 ( P ) Pronunciation Key (rp) n. Slang: A form of popular <a href="http://www.ntsearch.com/search.php?q=music&v=56">music</a> developed especially in African-American urban communities and characterized by spoken or chanted rhyming lyrics with a syncopated, repetitive rhythmic accompaniment. ^Don't forget the white man^ Poetic Scriptures poems: http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=157364 http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=157462 |
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10-20-04, 05:16 AM
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You Love My Style.
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IP: 5572 2B68
Shit...
This aint the usual "Oh I hate life." that you think im bringing This is real life feelings, and sadness what youre reading ^^this is amazin i am likin yo piece fam u elevated alot.
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