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Old 10-24-04, 12:22 AM   #1
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my life story

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iight man growin up wit parents ya neva seen/
the onli thing on they mind was gettin tha green/
neva carein bout they son they had at home/
at age 5 i was left all alone/

then ya grandmom come in n watch ova u/
she was real sick n there was nuuttin that i could do/
she lived in my house n had some bad cancer/
try ta call for help but was to young ta kno that the # i dialed was for a dirty dancer/

then when i became a teenager found out wat life was realli like/
still dunno all my fam for all i kno i koulda bin born by a pair of dykes/
went ta skool to get a education n grow ta learn/
but all it did was let me dwn in tha streets n just get burn/

see im still livin my life hard as shyt/
still walkin round tryin ta find tha right grl ta hit wit/
only got a 1 bes friend there for me/
n the grl i like aint got nuttin ta say but leave/

so now im depressed n need ta see my grandmom jus one more tyme/
thats y im sittin here spittin these ryhmes/
need tha feelin of bein loved once again/
but everytyme sum1 in trouble im the 1 they blame

now sum of u may think that this verse is lame/
but ta me this is my heart that i claim/

leave some feed bak on this its all from my heart peace
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Old 10-24-04, 01:12 AM   #2
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iight comon yall uppin for feed bak
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Old 10-24-04, 03:38 PM   #3
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comon sum1 leave some feedbak on dis
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Old 10-24-04, 04:04 PM   #4
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I was kind of feelin the story, the angst and all that. I could tell that u felt it to a certain degree. But the structure was fucked. U just need to clean it up a little and it'll be good.
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Old 10-25-04, 03:07 PM   #5
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iight thanx still uppin for feedbak
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