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11-07-04, 03:54 AM
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Bangs like bikini attol
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Dabatos vs Nostradamus
IP: 06B8 DBF2
Battle Rules: 10 - 50 Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting No Bullshit No Crazyness Topic: "Seeing The White Light" Putung en a mo!! uhh, I mean Goodluck!  Minimum posts to vote: 500 Check in by: 11-10-04 at 03:54 AM Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in. |
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11-07-04, 03:55 AM
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IP: 8491 1474
Dabatos has ACCEPTED this battle on 11-07-04 03:55 AM.
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11-07-04, 03:44 PM
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Banned: Cheating
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IP: E956 B690
Dabatos is a bitch who ducked me nuff said
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11-08-04, 07:56 AM
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IP: E63C BFED
Nostradamus has ACCEPTED this battle on 11-08-04 07:56 AM.
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11-10-04, 03:36 AM
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G.Y.T.
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IP: 8491 1474
Topic: Seeing The Light [Life] Life for me is full of tragedies, to loosing your family... Never had memories where i'm living life so happilly.. And sadely, im one of the few that never felt any love... Never had a beloved, now thinkin is there a lord above?? Too many day's i've been shoved, now i jst can't stand it... Day's of planning how i could make my very own life vanish... I could never understand it, why my life is so miserable... And its literal, when i say girls? none of em are original.. My life's too crazy, full of a few real and more fake people.. Causing me use a needle that can be dangerously lethal... [The First Try] My life's to horrible, so I attempted suicide two times... And after only two tries, i realized i jst can't remove life.. The first time i took a knife, nervous n squeezed my fist... Went at it on my wrist, knowing soon i may be lifeless... "My life's shit," I shouted when i failed suicide attempt... Woke up in a hospital, doctor's sayin it was self contempt.. the day i was released, i had great hopes of familly I'd reach... But noone came at all to see, if I was dead or could even breathe.. [Only Way To Solve My Problems] After that moment I knew my family had no emotion.. Hatred started growin, knowin they had no care or devotion... Then i had a some sort of erosion, givin me no fear of death... Because i knew that i'll have peace when my soul can rest... N I know best, there's only one way to solve this problem.. It's another attempt at death, where i know that i have fallin.. [The Second Try] Speakin of fallin, My next attempt is on a ten story building.. Standing on the edge, ready to do it, not afraid and willing... I lean forward, I can feel the air smoothly gliding through me.. At forty miles per hour, I never had a moment so soothing.. Saw the new's viewing, noticed that I was in everyones T.V. And for some reason, my family was right there to see me... At that very moment, I thought they cared, I started believing... Thinking what am i doing? Now my love ones im leaving.... [Lost Everything] As I stood up, i saw my body on the floor with no face... Not ready to embrace, to see what was my after life fate.. I look toward my family and friends, eye's full of tears... Felt stupid thinkin of how i wasted many future years... Not seeing them again is what I greatly fear the most... Knowing that later on to them im nothing but a lonely ghost... Now all i can do is hope, if i may go through the heaven gates.. Afraid it may be too late, since i never gave or had any faith.. [Heaven Gates] As I walked toward the gates, taller then thirty eiffel towers. Sorrounded by God's Power, all located where the clouds we're... I see a tall man in all white, carrying a book shinning bright light... It wasn't till he open'd it i realized it was the great, "Book of Life"... As he searched through pages n pages, he couldn't find my name.. My eye's opened wide, as he pointed towards the flaming flames.. I began begging for my life, sed that "i never did anything wrong" "I only took my life away, cuz i didn't want to live a bad lfe so long!!" He didn't look at me at all, from that moment I knew i couldn't win... I knew I was going to hell, as I was seeing the Light slowly dim... Book Of Life: It's a book where all the names of people are in that will go into heaven. |
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11-10-04, 03:39 AM
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IP: E63C BFED
"Seeing The White Light" "I have a dream, that my four little children will one day live in a nation where they will not be judged by the color of their skin but by the content of their character. I have a dream today!" Martin Luther King. [The Image – Racial Bias In Rap] What’s with the world? People really mustn’t give a shit.. Anymore cause my thoughts~just~reside inside a pit.. I need to quit, but my conscience keeps me in control.. If it wasn’t for lyrics id be known as a lost soul.. Truth be told, I never really cared about front covers.. But magazines are always so biased about our colors.. They don’t care about how dope the last single you wrote was.. They just care about pop charts, I swear their oblivious.. And I cant take them serious, their visions are all delirious.. Relating to a trend, that’s growth rate has me fearing this.. Generic lyricists, hearing his name and now he’s acting.. Not even a fraction of action until he started rapping.. Now he’s in his own world high horse acting spectacular.. With immaculate flows & hoes, sucked dry like Dracula.. However meaning in his lyrics is non existent.. Praise the system they didn’t miss him, but he aint on a mission.. He’s just wishing folks don’t realise he isn’t dope.. Acting nice to paparazzi, snorting lines of coke.. His whole world is fictitious, Id break his fucking face.. Cause raps just a stereotype, its all about your race.. [Untapped Potential – An Understanding] Are we accepted? Or are we pushed into the dark? Feeling misconception, like steel swords through the heart.. My fine art of lyricism’s, constantly being neglected.. Cause its our skin pigment, deciding if were respected.. Sometimes it feels like, this white light tests my mentals.. Cause being white in rap, is like writing with broken pencils.. Its aint easy always fighting to gain the upper hand.. And nah this aint slavery, but now I understand.. The true power of being held back upon my mind.. Constantly facing discrimination against my kind.. My flows perfected, got potential to be the greatest.. Sometimes I hate this, but I’m always a pessimist.. They call me a specialist, till they fucking discover.. That my face is white, it mustn’t be matching the cd cover.. Shit, I feel another, systematic flaw in my game.. Aint it fucked up, what I love, drives me insane.. But who’s to blame for this mishap, is it the media? Cause true rap is from within you, not what their feeding ya.. Its all lies, defining rap through popularity polls.. It aint about lyrics, its who’s image they can control.. [Seeing The Light – Chasing The Same Dream] I wonder if well ever learn to set aside our differences.. But distance in our culture’s why we fail in many instances.. It seems as though were being led around on a tight leash.. By trend setters, that kept profound letters that teach.. Racism, lies, violence and disbelief.. That left certain people, with immense amounts of beef.. I’m not sold on the idea that peace should be a law.. We need war, cause struggle is what most of us live for.. I’m just saying we need to realise equality is trife.. And uncover the burning rag that’s blocking our own light.. |
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11-10-04, 04:06 AM
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IP: E63C BFED
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11-10-04, 04:11 AM
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IP: 5510 817C
Voted For: Nostradamus
flow nos vocab nos structure same imanginary nos well nostradamus pretty much took this his vocab was on lock same with vocabulary you can tell who is more comfortable doin topicals here not sayin your shit was wack dabatos but nos i thought got you in this one up your vocab...my vote....nostradamus Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
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11-10-04, 04:13 AM
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Hates Fucking Idiots
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IP: CCAE A7E8
Voted For: Nostradamus
Dabatos [Life] Life for me is full of tragedies, to loosing your family... Never had memories where i'm living life so happilly.. And sadely, im one of the few that never felt any love... Never had a beloved, now thinkin is there a lord above?? Too many day's i've been shoved, now i jst can't stand it... Day's of planning how i could make my very own life vanish... I could never understand it, why my life is so miserable... And its literal, when i say girls? none of em are original.. My life's too crazy, full of a few real and more fake people.. Causing me use a needle that can be dangerously lethal... this was a good piece however i felt this section could of been improved on topic wise other than that the rhyming itself was ok some good vocab and flow & structure was cool too [The First Try] My life's to horrible, so I attempted suicide two times... And after only two tries, i realized i jst can't remove life.. The first time i took a knife, nervous n squeezed my fist... Went at it on my wrist, knowing soon i may be lifeless... "My life's shit," I shouted when i failed suicide attempt... Woke up in a hospital, doctor's sayin it was self contempt.. the day i was released, i had great hopes of familly I'd reach... But noone came at all to see, if I was dead or could even breathe.. this was a nice chapter i felt this one stayed on topic and again flowed very well...rhyming was good again [The Second Try] Speakin of fallin, My next attempt is on a ten story building.. Standing on the edge, ready to do it, not afraid and willing... I lean forward, I can feel the air smoothly gliding through me.. At forty miles per hour, I never had a moment so soothing.. Saw the new's viewing, noticed that I was in everyones T.V. And for some reason, my family was right there to see me... At that very moment, I thought they cared, I started believing... Thinking what am i doing? Now my love ones im leaving.... building and willing...to me don't rhyme...although i liked the mood switch u put out in this chapter that was quite good...flow not harmed and rhyming was ok that time [Lost Everything] As I stood up, i saw my body on the floor with no face... Not ready to embrace, to see what was my after life fate.. I look toward my family and friends, eye's full of tears... Felt stupid thinkin of how i wasted many future years... Not seeing them again is what I greatly fear the most... Knowing that later on to them im nothing but a lonely ghost... Now all i can do is hope, if i may go through the heaven gates.. Afraid it may be too late, since i never gave or had any faith.. nice chapter again nice rhyming flowing and structure stayed on topic very well again [Heaven Gates] As I walked toward the gates, taller then thirty eiffel towers. Sorrounded by God's Power, all located where the clouds we're... I see a tall man in all white, carrying a book shinning bright light... It wasn't till he open'd it i realized it was the great, "Book of Life"... As he searched through pages n pages, he couldn't find my name.. My eye's opened wide, as he pointed towards the flaming flames.. I began begging for my life, sed that "i never did anything wrong" "I only took my life away, cuz i didn't want to live a bad lfe so long!!" He didn't look at me at all, from that moment I knew i couldn't win... I knew I was going to hell, as I was seeing the Light slowly dim... nice closing chapter i liked it...nice twist u put there flowed and rhymed well topic stayed ok good verse Nostradamus "I have a dream, that my four little children will one day live in a nation where they will not be judged by the color of their skin but by the content of their character. I have a dream today!" Martin Luther King. Very nice way to start ya verse with a quote even though it wasn't you who said this...it was good imagery because it makes you feel like the writer is actually thewwre at the time [The Image – Racial Bias In Rap] What’s with the world? People really mustn’t give a shit.. Anymore cause my thoughts~just~reside inside a pit.. I need to quit, but my conscience keeps me in control.. If it wasn’t for lyrics id be known as a lost soul.. Truth be told, I never really cared about front covers.. But magazines are always so biased about our colors.. They don’t care about how dope the last single you wrote was.. They just care about pop charts, I swear their oblivious.. And I cant take them serious, their visions are all delirious.. Relating to a trend, that’s growth rate has me fearing this.. Generic lyricists, hearing his name and now he’s acting.. Not even a fraction of action until he started rapping.. Now he’s in his own world high horse acting spectacular.. With immaculate flows & hoes, sucked dry like Dracula.. However meaning in his lyrics is non existent.. Praise the system they didn’t miss him, but he aint on a mission.. He’s just wishing folks don’t realise he isn’t dope.. Acting nice to paparazzi, snorting lines of coke.. His whole world is fictitious, Id break his fucking face.. Cause raps just a stereotype, its all about your race.. wow...thats all i can say opening chapter had my eyes nearly out their sockets...some real good rhyming in there flowed well and structure on point...topic...on point this i see is the warm up... [Untapped Potential – An Understanding] Are we accepted? Or are we pushed into the dark? Feeling misconception, like steel swords through the heart.. My fine art of lyricism’s, constantly being neglected.. Cause its our skin pigment, deciding if were respected.. Sometimes it feels like, this white light tests my mentals.. Cause being white in rap, is like writing with broken pencils.. Its aint easy always fighting to gain the upper hand.. And nah this aint slavery, but now I understand.. The true power of being held back upon my mind.. Constantly facing discrimination against my kind.. My flows perfected, got potential to be the greatest.. Sometimes I hate this, but I’m always a pessimist.. They call me a specialist, till they fucking discover.. That my face is white, it mustn’t be matching the cd cover.. Shit, I feel another, systematic flaw in my game.. Aint it fucked up, what I love, drives me insane.. But who’s to blame for this mishap, is it the media? Cause true rap is from within you, not what their feeding ya.. Its all lies, defining rap through popularity polls.. It aint about lyrics, its who’s image they can control.. this is a damn good chapter describing the life of a white rapper tryin to make it...a very nice twist on this story...again flowed well an on point so far... [Seeing The Light – Chasing The Same Dream] I wonder if well ever learn to set aside our differences.. But distance in our culture’s why we fail in many instances.. It seems as though were being led around on a tight leash.. By trend setters, that kept profound letters that teach.. Racism, lies, violence and disbelief.. That left certain people, with immense amounts of beef.. I’m not sold on the idea that peace should be a law.. We need war, cause struggle is what most of us live for.. I’m just saying we need to realise equality is trife.. And uncover the burning rag that’s blocking our own light.. dope closer...this won it here for me in my opinion the rhyming and flow and the way it's on topic won it for me...Dabatos had a dope verse too but the rhyming wasn't as strong as Nos' on this occasion thats why my voe is for Nos Sig shows my links...be a good sport will ya and put an honest 1 in there 
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11-10-04, 08:50 AM
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IP: E63C BFED
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11-10-04, 06:16 PM
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Bangs like bikini attol
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IP: 8FB6 AEBF
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11-10-04, 07:50 PM
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G.Y.T.
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IP: 8491 1474
uppin uppin uppin uppin uppin uppin uppin uppin uppin uppin uppin uppin
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11-11-04, 12:04 AM
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<<-Carpe Noctum->>
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IP: 0825 899A
Voted For: Nostradamus
wow, this was one of the dopest and real topicals i;ve read on the site, no joke,,,,i'm really blown away right now,,i consider this Nostras win, for the creativity and vocabulary in his verse, the topic was incredibly portrayed here,both topicals had vivid imagery in them,but i felt dabatos verse was the usual white light, heavens gate story i've read before, but you both did a great job, i just felt Nostras verse was deeper and more powerful.....great job you guys.damn.1
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11-11-04, 05:50 AM
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IP: E63C BFED
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11-11-04, 11:34 AM
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Bangs like bikini attol
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IP: E63C BFED
Uppin again.......................................
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