dis is a song from my group Tha Dynasty theres 5 members we stikll need all the members writtens but here it is so far tell me wat u liked in each verse and wat u didnt like in each verse

(Hook)
Wat u think of Dat,our money gettin stacked,Tha Dynasty coming from Tha P can u handle,we takin ova and thats a fact


Lil'Chi (me)

Er since i was born,i was looked down and hated on/and erbody made fun of my songs,and said i think im grown/but now im gettin big erbody think i got skills, and they wannabe my friend since i get drove in a coupe deville/I dont about yall hatas, yall can say im not a playa/Im jus gon make my dough, and giv some 2 my boys in Chicago/ya dats wassup,so gon throw it up/now that im a rappa while im doin my math,pple come and say can i have ur autograph/
so i gotta be da 1 to break it down for ya,and i gotta be tha 1 to act a clown on ya/I might be a youngin, but im still thuggin/Rockin my du rag while my pants sag/

hook plays

Lil'Benz

im 13 im hot, like young gonz cant stop and wont stop/itz tha dynasty and we cant be topped,so shawty step back before u get popped/u really think u hot,but i think u really not,u might as well quit cause ur labels gettin dropped/sorry 2 say im not tha best,but goin against u is nuttin but a test,so little boy sit down and take a rest/LilBenz comin straught out da P neva thought u guess, u see me walkin down ur street wit 20 gs in my vest/

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battles
me vs JpMoney06
me vs ostrich

nice shit yo.

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i wanna kno wat u think of the verses and tha hook iight 1

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battles
me vs JpMoney06
me vs ostrich

sorry man, but this is wack.
the hook is VERY basic, and the verses are trash.
yall aint rappin about shit, and the very little content yall DO have is what every single rapper you hear on the radio say.
its played and comercial.
keep elevating.
find a topic and stick with it.
pz

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R.I.P. Bodie

thanx for real feed back

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battles
me vs JpMoney06
me vs ostrich

ya word, your flow was messed up completley by the 3rd line.............

its coo dawg, keep it up peace 1luv

yea, the whole flow was too basic and simple...jus keep elevatin. peace.

what bitch we the real DYNASTY yous franchise bitch and you been ducking my crew we got 2 callouts to you in your crew forum yall suck you dont deserve to have a forum

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ya what empire said lol

lol this was so wack...haha i laughed in my head or sry just lieing i laughed out loud...0/10 stucture super fucked

damn dawg it was too damn basic, needed to step it up, ya mostly messed up in da 3 first lines they was plain wack, everybody raps that kind of stuff ya need to rap about something dat feels comfortable with u aight
keep at it though

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Free Agent

It Was Kind Of Basic...But The Flow Was Cool...Just Keep Elivating YourSelf Nigka......

Blah at this peice of shit....