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12-05-04, 02:15 AM
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Denial..
IP: 283B 08F8
Denial
Tears bleed from innocent eyes, as I refuse to believe Pupils disperse flowing rivers as my emotions unweave Deep expressions arise, blind to the facts that are alive This lie is another piece of the puzzle in my endless demise The story of a man, who denies his talent in his lyrical drops Alters reality without believing others lies, fibs, or thoughts Truth is lost in shadows, caused from translucent thoughts that thrive It can’t be true, I won’t allow it, will my soul survive? Abstract thinking, I don’t trust your feelings or anything that you tell The days purpose forgot, my mind has been locked in a cell Raindrops of forgotten fear, that this lie may not be a fake Rewind times as corrupted minds begin to cripple and break Head throbbing, as tears are dropping from my blood stained face Racing confusion in this illusion of useless truth-less faith Craniums drop misplaced information as my relation is freed Eyes bleed as I watch myself grow up from an infant seed Greed overwhelming beings into fleeing from the unknown truth Don’t believe me? Look around you, everything you see is living proof Topical flows grow into finished woes as my lost emotions’ pile Story of fiends, forgetting dreams, as they believe their own denial Authentik Intelligence |
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12-06-04, 12:36 PM
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IP: 283B 08F8
Feedback please...
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12-06-04, 12:57 PM
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IP: FA63 454B
Ok...This Was Tight, I Liked The Way You Used Meta's And The Way Everything Flowed, Emotion Ran Well Throughout The Poem, And It Really Compelled Me To Read It Due To The Vocab & Creativity...Seriously I See Why A.I. Let You In, Even Though They Are'nt As Strong As They Were Before...But Anyway Keep Dropping, I'll Look Forward To Your Next Produce...Check Some Of My Quick OM If You Have Time.
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12-06-04, 02:20 PM
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IP: 283B 08F8
I'll try to check your Open Wound's OM. Thanks
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