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12-10-04, 08:56 PM
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God is a Fable.
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A Crow Left of the Murder
IP: B20F 67F7
this is from my battle on 411
for all those cats that like the vocab here is a piece for you when the fluttery flurry of feathers settled, the existentialists looked disheveled. the blustery breeze wilted everything besides the lonely lilac's petals ripping through metal, tearing through fog, a crow died at dawn through mental interaction, we heard God's divinely harmonous song an angel faintly hummed along, but somehow forgot her beat and so a crow fell from the sky, pummeling into the concrete gaia gazed unbearably towards her streets, and graciously lended a tear but she shut her eyes and turned her ears; a mechanical axis with broken gears some thought she was harsh, that she was forgetful of her children but i called out, "you're the forgetful ones...the forests are the pilgrims" i heard a caw, and turned to my left, just in time to see the death and for the dead marching crows, i let out a conclusive breath whispered the elegy in lament, and reminisced of ignorant days paid the price to know the ropes, still stuck in the stone(d) age i felt for the crow deep down in my heart, as it tried to deface this faceless art.... watching it all come together was almost as beautiful as watching it all fall apart A piece for all you emotional type folks A C.R.O.W. Left of the Murder. Lifes chase let me misplace all that mattered. A disgrace to be replaced by the pieces I've shattered. Placing perfection across the path that was meant. Facing the direction away from the pockets that were spent. Dollar signs realigned my mind towards the greeds we're born with. Temporarily confined my lines until I designed the dream I once missed. Pushed the pens ink deep, staining the surface beneath. Once words and suicide meet the pain and worthless will drink. I grabbed the cup of death and swallowed life untill nothing left. Felt trapped and threw-up my chest, followed lights towards the exit. Met those above, those in charge of drugs and love. Slept after being drunk and shared stories with a heroic monk. I was told the steps I should've stepped Showed the folds I regret and able to hold those I left. A night of smiles, halos, innocence and happiness. Tought to write to as a child with brillance and intelligence. Only to awake to tears and a cramping stomach for food Wish I could take fears and watch them plummit from the moon. That nite when the blackbird lured my heart towards suicide. No sight, only a burning hurt that turned into the quotes I write. An evening of death, lived and found how to walk proper. Forget being upset, begin to pronounce how I prosper. A Crow, was left to show of the murder I swallowed Christ's Rising Over Words came from the evening I followed.. Last edited by led poetic : 12-14-04 at 01:42 AM. |
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12-11-04, 11:55 PM
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God is a Fable.
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IP: 133C 7AC8
uppin please dont sleep on this... i know its long but i just had to get 2 different pieces in this case
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12-13-04, 06:47 PM
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<<-Carpe Noctum->>
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IP: 28AD 5545
is this from the 411 hype forum battles? are you arcane from there? beautifull poems tho, and great vocab...loved these
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12-13-04, 10:07 PM
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IP: 283B 08F8
Good stuff. But i disagree with ure user title. Don't get too cocky my friend
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12-14-04, 01:35 AM
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God is a Fable.
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IP: 9588 E886
bloom i wouldnt get to cocky...
and yes fluid i am arcane from 411... also im led poetic from UF deadly my boy ova there but no this is from one of my paragon matches |
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12-15-04, 02:54 PM
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The Ups and Downs of Life
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IP: D666 F54C
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o.k... I dont get it... if your arcane from 411 why did you post Christs poetry battle verse against you in this thread like it's yours? - looks like biting to me. Quote:
http://www.411hype.com/forums/showthread.php?t=22179
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12-15-04, 03:40 PM
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God is a Fable.
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IP: B7EE 6DD9
i said it was from my battle there... christs is my boy on there and he wanted me to post it as a collab but i didnt put it in the title
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12-16-04, 01:54 PM
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IP: 0825 899A
^anywayz, going to feedback...
 this content was very good........ Only to awake to tears and a cramping stomach for food Wish I could take fears and watch them plummit from the moon. That nite when the blackbird lured my heart towards suicide. No sight, only a burning hurt that turned into the quotes I write. ^vocab nice, imagery was there.... those were the best lines..... p.s. you don't have to explain yourself to people, you've been doing that for a while now...  Good Luck with this and drop some more poetry, so i can read it, aight stay up.. pz
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