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12-19-04, 11:07 PM
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A Reflection Of The Past
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Outside Looking In
IP: 88C4 C811
outside looking in a little fragile innocent boy, joey always would walk to school the nerdy and sometimes autistic child trying to be cool but for some reason he was never given a chance made fun of with his looks, the way he talked, and his stance however he would always remain strong with his head up one day he came home with a black eye and was fed up he promised he wouldn't let up and keep going strong getting good grades, and no longer wondering if he belonged because he knew he was special and loved at home if he was being made fun of by his friends, he really belongs alone because friends dont hate nor put down eachother beings friends is like a bond you keep, your like brothers so joey went on to finish school and went on to college while his past bullies were failures, and never found knowledge and joey saw this, he never looked back, he became a lawyer protected other young kids who were bullied and bothered he succeded in making new laws and new ways for students, children of all ages to have better days because no child deserves to get treated with no love and no care lets be fair and admit being a bully is pointless and gets you no where
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12-19-04, 11:10 PM
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Nigga Ima OG.
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good piece.. I liekd it alot, lot of imagery, and consent flow..
not much big vocab, but for a piece like this its not needed. but the first 2 lines made me laugh.. LOL.. good piece, keep at it man.. you got something good going keep elevating. please return the favor: http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=167103 -remeber get 2 links (replys you did on others O.M), or mods will shut this piece, and dont let that happen.. its a coo piece.
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12-19-04, 11:45 PM
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IP: ABE5 5A5C
uppin this piece
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12-20-04, 01:03 AM
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IP: ABE5 5A5C
upp upp and away
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12-21-04, 01:05 AM
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IP: ABE5 5A5C
upping upping and upping
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12-21-04, 03:11 AM
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IP: ABE5 5A5C
yall are wack man......someone give feedback
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12-21-04, 03:50 AM
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A'ight this was a very nice piece...flow was off a bit in places but overall this was very dope...I liked it a lot, keep up the good work!
 Yo, couold you return the favor on mine?"Love's Empitiness" Thanks. |
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12-22-04, 09:31 PM
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A Reflection Of The Past
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IP: 28AD 5545
uppin this piece
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12-27-04, 12:31 AM
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IP: 28AD 5545
well fine then!
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