yo this is a short lil spit about the inglewood shit, niggas gettin beat in the streetz

short flow lemme know if I should make it longer, like into a full song

verse

yo our niggas is gettin beat down by police violence/ while we stare in silence/ bust this nigga and swing back/ be strong and proud to be black/ I'm havin flashbax, rodney king beatin reborn/ The black community was torn/ let us not begin to sit back with this one/ videotaper arrested nigga fuck this, is this what white america calls justice?/ if this is it put us back on the boat and give us our huts n sticks/ we rollin from the hoods and ghettos black america calls out for justice...


lemme know y'a'll

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it was short-n-simple

but yet sweet

you really can't complain on struture
when it's a verse to uplift

you have a pretty good head start
goahead and finish the race

holla

-1-

i like this shit it carry'z a strong message......check my spits to holla

i think... if i turn this into an actual song, I'm goin to use this as a chorus? no?

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good shit dog i was feelin that joint i don't really kno about a chorus though
C.F.C

tsk, a little expansion on the length and an uppin of the vocab really required here. but you picked a topic to push your rhymes in, which is a really good idea and had some decent imagery as well.

pzz.

up

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not hatin' or none like that..but sunny..chu had a good frame of mind on it..but i felt it could've been deeper..more detail...andd lit like that..but keep it up

it ain't a song, just a potential chorus

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Bars Of War - Champ
L.L.L. - Former HWeight Champ
S.S. - Hall Of Fame

The Eclipse...