I was bored and started writing this song to this beat and realized I liked it a lot. I'm gonna finish it, but I'm trying to get some feedback as I go. NO MATTER WHAT YOU SAY IN HERE, I AM STILL GOING TO REDO THIS VERSE. So please be honest and drop some feedback

The Realness

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I left feedback in Seventhird's Diss thread and DeadlyVision's Acuity Abuse ™

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i like this beat for the vibe u were goin for on this track...... yea u should rerecord ur verse cuz its a lil off at some points.... i think if ur still not done, that at some parts where u tryna say too many words on a single line that u should take some out obviously.... but im sayin that also cuz it also would go better to go slower on this track, the beats not bangin so its more lyrical seemin, and its better to make it easier to hear all ur lyrics on those tracks.... especially wen its more of a story....

get this track updated soon, and also, i think itd be cool to just use the beat as a hook, or if not, make it very chill...... like a girls voice or sumthin softer...

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...The real Renegade before Hova...

Thanks for the input....I'll definately take that into account when I redo it ™

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i really liked this. Beat was pretty nice. Your flow on this was tight too. Real good. Lyrics on point fashos. Quality isn't best, but still nice. good job, yo. 8/10
Bump bump bump!!!!

RTF:
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=184981

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Flow was off and on..lol like u said fam u gonna redo it......beat is like Bboy kinda shit am feelin it. fuck it let me get in this shit..hahahaha....u used alot of sylables..lol maybe if u reworded lil bit and made it less would make good understanding to the listeners but emotions am feelin it its on point

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this shit aight......beat is cool....flow is off on sum points Lmaoat usay chorizo....that stuff isgud wit eggs yo anyways nice song i wanna hear the final product thats word