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05-27-05, 03:13 PM
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.:: Plagued By Fear ::.
IP: 3240 794D
.:: Plagued By Fear ::. He sadly said his goodbyes, young eyes noticing a rash's purple shades; mother's mottled skin rising horrors from bottled sins, as if cut by blades. Hearing the rat's feet, scurrying as his mother turned skinny, fat beat. Infected, survival a miracle, a feat as her voice grew gravelly like concrete. Smelling the acrid odor, like the fumes from a battered and broken motor. Rasping breaths from Sister, the listener hearing the sounds of dying smokers. The scent of burning flesh could be smelled for miles as the dead were laid to rest, laying in coffins for the corpses, poorly-dressed families acting as if possessed. He charged through the wooden door, to the lands ravaged as if by a horrible war. Almost slipping on the blood adorning the floor as the lone child began to explore. Escaping the scene, though every place was identical, severely lacking pristine. Each moment obscene, heavily-protected men shoveling bodies into bonfires in routine. His sobs weren't audible as he ran wildily for a nonexistent safety, out of control. An unconsolable, aching soul, a sad child searching without any type of set goal. Every inch of the city was a tomb, lost and diseased children desperate for a home. Every trash can thoroughly combed, by the road warriors that would silently roam. Large fires would occasionally break out, followed by horrible, animal-like shouts. A lands without a devout, following the rat's ways, each following their own route. Searching for self-survival, the shimmering sun's rays doing nothing after its short arrival. Everyone could hear the sad prayers for family revival, each human becoming a rival. Last edited by Kein Witz : 05-31-05 at 08:11 PM. |
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05-27-05, 03:24 PM
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IP: 0AE0 3B1A
Dont forget to drop a link please, or this will be closed
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05-30-05, 08:43 PM
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IP: 3240 794D
Alright. I'll get a link in a few.
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05-30-05, 10:03 PM
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IP: 3240 794D
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05-31-05, 01:59 PM
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IP: 3240 794D
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05-31-05, 03:13 PM
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IP: 3240 794D
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05-31-05, 05:05 PM
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IP: 3240 794D
>< Dfjnlnlsadh!
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05-31-05, 05:22 PM
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IP: 828D 0B7A
Yea wasnt dope to be honest
Still good though Some nice multi use felt if u shortened ur bars they would of been dope though Searching for self-survival, the shimmering sun's rays doing nothing after its short arrival. Everyone could hear the sad prayers for family revival, each human becoming a rival. I liked that though that was nice But for example about line length Like a rash spreading before his young eyes, he noticed the purple shades; the mottled skin rose horrors from his bottled sins, her skin cut as if by blades. this either needed more multi's or shorter lines in it Nice drop though content was nice, stay up http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2187545 Please return the favour |
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05-31-05, 08:11 PM
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IP: 3240 794D
How is it now? o_O
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06-01-05, 01:18 PM
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IP: 3240 794D
Yargen flargen.
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