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Old 07-10-05, 12:04 AM   #1
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Arrow Anatomy of Crash

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It happened so slowly yet it happened so fast, can that be
possible I sit here and ask.
Car I didn’t see, out of nowhere a car broadsided me, next
thing I know I smell smoke and my seat belt is jammed
on my throat.
Grab my keys I break the window, my hand tore up,
shattered glass as a memento.
I heard the crunch of metal bending, the incridescent
shatter of glass a million breaking.
Listening, smelling all my senses alive, but I was powerless
to try and find the overdrive.
Hit broadsided, I screamed outloud, tears rushed to my eyes
as I went crashing down.
My life flashed before me, my future I hadn’t yet seen,
my past that was gone, and everything inbetween
Everything was crystal clear, the oncoming car, white like
a star, bore down on me hard
I saw the driver’s face before the impact took place,
eyes wide and terrified I prayed they had a fate.
Hot liquid running down into my eyes, I wiped it away
and blood was the reply.
I climbed out of my car slowly but breathing, I fell on the
ground scared and chest heaving.
I heard the screams of the other driver, asking if I was alright
and who’s fault it was.
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Old 07-10-05, 04:59 AM   #2
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Damn This Is Filled Wit Emotion and Feeling...I Was Feelin This Poem Alot i likd how you put it together and it stayed on topic very well...Good Work
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Old 07-10-05, 01:30 PM   #3
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thanks for the feed, uppin.
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Old 07-10-05, 10:52 PM   #4
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this was really good, imagery and emotion were excellent, very nice poem, keep it up
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