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07-10-05, 12:04 AM | #1 | |||||
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Anatomy of Crash
IP: 0DB3 4A20
It happened so slowly yet it happened so fast, can that be
possible I sit here and ask. Car I didn’t see, out of nowhere a car broadsided me, next thing I know I smell smoke and my seat belt is jammed on my throat. Grab my keys I break the window, my hand tore up, shattered glass as a memento. I heard the crunch of metal bending, the incridescent shatter of glass a million breaking. Listening, smelling all my senses alive, but I was powerless to try and find the overdrive. Hit broadsided, I screamed outloud, tears rushed to my eyes as I went crashing down. My life flashed before me, my future I hadn’t yet seen, my past that was gone, and everything inbetween Everything was crystal clear, the oncoming car, white like a star, bore down on me hard I saw the driver’s face before the impact took place, eyes wide and terrified I prayed they had a fate. Hot liquid running down into my eyes, I wiped it away and blood was the reply. I climbed out of my car slowly but breathing, I fell on the ground scared and chest heaving. I heard the screams of the other driver, asking if I was alright and who’s fault it was.
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07-10-05, 04:59 AM | #2 | |||||||
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IP: 17A8 F574
Damn This Is Filled Wit Emotion and Feeling...I Was Feelin This Poem Alot i likd how you put it together and it stayed on topic very well...Good Work
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07-10-05, 01:30 PM | #3 | |||||
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IP: 59A2 9AA1
thanks for the feed, uppin.
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07-10-05, 10:52 PM | #4 | ||||
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IP: 7AAE 323B
this was really good, imagery and emotion were excellent, very nice poem, keep it up
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i come from a time when you earned respect, for your rhyme and the way you made words connect, not the money that you made or the girls you sexed, a concept you obviously haven't heard of yet Mars Ill
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