(verse 1)
I ain't sure of who's my role model,
But I know that I'm the one for my daughter
I try to step higher but try not to obfuscate
Hip Hop jus doesn't seems to be the music of the state
And I want to touch the sky once more
and when I fall down stop bein as I was before
my life ricochetted from pain to love and back in the game
in the name of Fame, Ax dpgg won't change, I'l lbe the same
I came from a state where Rap wasn't on the main plate
but somehow it jus felt to my fate
thats great....... ain't it?....... it riled me a bit
yo think that 99% of my niggaz thought rap was shit
we black people don't get the respect that we deserve
angry music?, Violent culture... I call it "talented Verbs"
cuz Hip Hop is the only fuckin music with feet on da ground
And I jus can't remember when It made me sound........ like:

(Hook)
I don't think that Hip Hop is a game.... But its the same
Why do we have to rap about pain.... cuz Its a shame
Escalade with golden spinnin rimz... Like if we were kings
Respect and assasination themes.... are those dreams?

(Verse 2)
I got a hundred niggaz watchin the block, and I ain't from New York
I still disrespect niggaz all the time If I don't like how they talk
And i can't remember when I first started to rap
I'm mnemonically tryin to froce me, I wish I get shot
not now.. but maybe tomorrow, cuz we don't know
when the fuck will Lord call us to perform in another show
"Rich Fuck".... yeah I love my life, But I can't remember where I woke up
to have the things I have now, health, friends, And I ain't broke
I try to be cool, except when niggaz suffer "elbow grease"
Involving themselves in stuppid beefs, Its a strong Desease
Nigga please....
think about your life for a minute......... fucked up ain't it?
Go head and kill ya self, but think it can change if you twist ur spirit
Don't leave feed on this rap if you gon hate like we hate 50
but if you ain't like that.. you intelligent niggaz... so feed me
I'll try to optimize my rap, generalize this whole poetical piece, its nice
like: "take my advice" try to remember where did you picked up this slice

(Hook)
I don't think that Hip Hop is a game.... But its the same
Why do we have to rap about pain.... cuz Its a shame
Escalade with golden spinnin rimz... Like if we were kings
Respect and assasination themes.... are those dreams?

Link:
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=207926

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Bizzacckkk

...............bump..........................

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Bizzacckkk

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ah... shit.... aight:
Link:

http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2458471

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Bizzacckkk

Alright this was a good drop..I liked the flow and you got some spelling/grammars errors. Don't try to say "Niggas" too many times especially in one bar...that just killst he flow. I liked your approach, it was very basic could've creative. Overall Good verse here, keep writing...PEACE.

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