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Old 10-26-05, 02:23 PM   #1
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"True Story"-U.N.F-Hot Shitttttt!!!
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Old 10-26-05, 02:34 PM   #2
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ok listening:

bheat i dun like very like.... hook is weird lol it sounded better over msn.. i dun like this at all...

verse 1... emotion is iite... fill your lines out a bit so your flow dont sound choppy. lyrics are iite.. not a bad verse

hook change it its retty wack.....

i heard a bit of english then lol try tio drop your amercian accent its gay... emotion is pretty kool... same as the other one really..

hook noo... noty growing on me lol

not a bad track but not the best ive heard... i dun like the hook. drop your amercian accent, be yourself...

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Old 10-26-05, 04:02 PM   #3
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Itds ok you know but i'm not rly feelin the chorus that much just sounds like mumble jumbal it sounds like just talking to me u know put some heart into the song everything else seems kinda ok but the funny voices on the chorus a lil weird man but its all good nie concept im feelin that tight beat over all 7.5 /10
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Old 10-26-05, 04:06 PM   #4
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like EC said.. im not feeling the hook.. the verses are iight.. i actually kinda like your voice.. its cool... but you need to work on your flow.. its choppy as hell.. and your lyrics are too much.. take away the vocab a little bit.. its a bit over done..overall pretty good track for being new to audio
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Old 10-26-05, 04:10 PM   #5
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Thx For The Feed Dudes ..Upping This Isshhhh
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Old 10-26-05, 04:12 PM   #6
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listenin...not likin the hook atall...sorry dawg...it seems ure puttin on the accent...first verse...u gotta flow better...ure talkin too much.. its choppy...hook gettin a lil catchy now pretty nice..delivery is a natural thing with you...2nd verse...is a lil better.emotion better...shoutin too much...this is an ok track...ure best one...but still to me its 5/10 at the best...and thats on the real tip
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Old 10-26-05, 04:23 PM   #7
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Old 10-26-05, 04:27 PM   #8
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did u lower the pitch of ur voice?


ur presence on the mic has potential...work on it though

flow is ehh

lyrics eh

not feelin the lowering of the pitch


u've come better than this

keep droppin


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Old 10-26-05, 04:32 PM   #9
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Thx For Feed ...Upping..I Guess lol
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Old 10-26-05, 05:17 PM   #10
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ok...beat needs somthing..but has major potental...you need to mix ur vocals and put more base in your voice but,lyricaly ur not bad at all man....you'll find your knack man keep it up ur determin if nuthin else
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Old 10-27-05, 11:31 AM   #11
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I agree on the hook...it just sounds weird...can't quite put my finger on what's bothering me...

Not really feeling beat either, ain't easiest one to spit on and not really this type of track. Verses are good though, lyrics are pretty nice, flow is gettin there too...keep on working on it, it's gonna pay off eventually. You working at it and it shows too, you improving with your presence as well.

Keep at it man!
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Old 10-29-05, 09:38 AM   #13
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