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11-28-05, 05:14 PM
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Poet's Daughter.
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poet ambition.
IP: B0FC ACE8
I need it.
I need your whip to make Scars on my back to let the Emotion out from my heart To my eyes. I need it. I need your foul talk to creep Inside me, like the shadow of Death and like ticks to suck Everything from the inside Out. I need your arms to be like Muhammad Ali to force me On the ground, while the tears Bawling out of my eye’s, Smearing my make up while I'm Screaming for help. I need it. I need your palm to come Across my face. Hit me in the Gut, so the blood will come Out, like watching a rose blooming from my body. I need it. I need your alcohol breath Slowly make its way in my Nostrils, my bones, I want It Broken, my eye’s I want it Swollen, my pride in myself I want it to be pure guilt. Please I want my legs cripple While I walk upstairs. I need… A pen and paper. . . Thank you father for the ink With full of emotion in my pen Ready to be unleashed, and the Blood you created from me Ready to be drawn in Words. http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=215581 http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=214421
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11-29-05, 04:50 PM
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Poet's Daughter.
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IP: 6EDA 34C6
Bump............
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mystery Is a Freak!! ITawAPuddyKat: Yeah, I guess. But I won't be a Lesbo for life. Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8 ITawAPuddyKat: Well Yes, Yes I do. Smartone Freal: ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u Smartone Freal: ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol Smartone Freal: lol sorry thats private ITawAPuddyKat: EWWWWWWW..*Sigged* |
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11-29-05, 08:12 PM
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Please excuse My Sickness
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IP: 28AD 5545
Sort on Lines kinda reptitive Has a good point to it But Ive seen way betta from you
keep it up
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11-30-05, 03:02 AM
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You Love My Style.
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IP: 3902 77B8
I agree on the repatative part
but emotions made up for it i like how you painted vivid imagery on some of the scene's this is nice
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