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Old 12-24-05, 08:19 AM   #1
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Sun Moon...some poetical shit...
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Old 12-24-05, 09:20 AM   #2
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I already told you how I felt about this on AIM. But, I'll drop proper feed here.

Your flow is good for the most part. However, it gets repetitive by the time you get to the "moon" part because it's just a straight, continuous flow. I'd suggest using starts and stops to vary your flow some.

Your delivery was good at some points, lackluster at others. Towards the end of the "earth" part, I was really feeling your lyrics and the energy with which you were spitting. I'd suggest varying the tone/pitch of your voice at times to add variety to your delivery.

The beat was fine. I enjoyed the "sun" part the most, the "moon" part the least, and appreciated the lyrics in the "earth" part.

Overall, this was a creative and very insightful piece. Your lyrics ranged from decent, to good, to quite thought provoking. This is a good drop that would be better with a more dynamic flow/delivery scheme.


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Old 12-24-05, 05:00 PM   #3
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sun moon?
nigga
lol
what happened to what I told you to name it?
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If you do kegel excercises, you would be able to do something similar without having to hold your tip shut with your hand. After you've been doing them, hold off ejaculating as long as you can to really let the pressure build and then aim for your girlfriend's eye and let 'er rip.. You might get lucky and shoot her eye out. That's probably exaggerating it a bit, but it will still be hilarious
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Old 12-24-05, 05:22 PM   #4
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forget wut u said...n yea..name could proly b better...ehh
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Old 12-24-05, 05:32 PM   #5
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it was lyrically Celestial
or just Celestial
it was some shit that had Celestial in it
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If you do kegel excercises, you would be able to do something similar without having to hold your tip shut with your hand. After you've been doing them, hold off ejaculating as long as you can to really let the pressure build and then aim for your girlfriend's eye and let 'er rip.. You might get lucky and shoot her eye out. That's probably exaggerating it a bit, but it will still be hilarious
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Old 12-24-05, 05:42 PM   #6
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*takes wills advice real quick*
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Old 12-24-05, 05:43 PM   #7
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My negga droppin it..nice one..u elevating quick track by track
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Old 12-25-05, 12:21 PM   #8
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man....the x-mas wack-off...is always the best wack off IMO...anyway uppp up n away !
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"when i rap they say im radical...but if rappin dont do it...ima clap u in the clavicle to classical music"

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Im not as much of a pimp as Ebircs.....man if you still with O.Y.D. You should branch off into O.H.D. into the porn business. With Owning Her daily. Ebircs....Biggest pimp on RV.
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Old 12-28-05, 06:42 PM   #9
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